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Bleeding Art
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 08:27:31 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Strip the hands of flesh, not even nerve endings remain
Remove the lungs last breath, leave only a razor sharp pain
Clarify the sight of emptiness, and recognize death is endless
Corrupt the mind of feeling, numb but aching in the core
An open wound never healing, and let the nothingness become a sore
Piece together the puzzle of silence, and renounce what was once quiet
Shatter the broken heart, and center the meaning of love
Face the reflection, a bleeding art, and rip off your wings from above
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Separate the perfection of lust, and never allow love - to rust
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ForeverAlone
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by nhisname2005 on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 08:38:45 PM AEST
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| I don't usually go for dark poetry cause it makes me sad... but i took a look at yours and i am so glad. .. did i rhyme didn't mean to... anyways.. wow.. and more wow. really liked how you wrote it.. will be reading more of your work... sandy |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by BloodyTearDrops on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 08:54:12 PM AEST
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Hey Clark,
Thank you for helping me with my stuff. I love the way you write as i tell you all the time. And like i say.......i wish i could right as deep as you! |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by xxbreathlessx on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:03:11 PM AEST
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| deep and dark. holds all the elements dark poetry should. i think you did a great job. |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by Zeldianus on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:07:21 PM AEST
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| dark and beautiful! I love it! you are getting better by the day!! |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by PoisonousPyscho on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 09:49:41 PM AEST
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| Short notexactly sweet but one of the best materpiees i have ever read in my life! i am truly amazed at this work...keep it up!!! |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 11:10:27 PM AEST
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wow i am impress.
awsome dark write just the way i like it. |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 11:12:43 PM AEST
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*claps like crazy* Wow Clark---I LOVE this!!! Such a darkly disturbing first line to draw the reader in! Excellent wording that paints a very vivid picture...Love the ending too, and everything in between...Please DO keep it up!!! Love the title too....lol ; )
Scorp. |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by blackholesun on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 12:43:11 AM AEST
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| love it,so much deeper then what it seems |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by forsaken_soul33 on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 02:37:46 PM AEST
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I am very impressed.
This is the first poem I have read under the topic of Dark Poetry. I really liked it, I look forward to more work from you.
Bye,
☺Mando☺ |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 05:42:31 PM AEST
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Clark what can I say? Absolutely awesome. Ur talent truly shines through this brilliant piece of poetry. So vivid and deep, u capture the readers attention with the darkness of ur work. Always a pleasure to read ur work.
Cheers,
dreamer |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 09:54:29 PM AEST
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as i told you, brilliant, but i hate it ::smiles::
whats with all the repeats? |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st July 2005 @ 04:01:08 AM AEST
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| thats is some great writing your talent is dark and brite very versatilely great jod 5 from me |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by heartbroken4ever on
Saturday, 2nd July 2005 @ 07:02:26 PM AEST
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Babe you know I hate ur dark poems but what can I say it's what u do best at. I love you babe.
your angel
Amber |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by Silent-No-More on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 09:32:04 PM AEST
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Damn, Clark - this is something! That opening line is very nearly enough in and of itself. What a potent piece!
Ever so gently, I'd suggest that this could be tightened up just a tad. I'd pull the "a" from the second line and the "and" out of the fifth, sixth and eighth lines... all really just going to flow. Of course, ignore me if it feels best to do so.
Thanks for the reminder that I ought to check out dark poetry now and again... for clearly, as evidenced here, there are treasure to be found when doing so.
~Snem~
(who, oddly enough, usually only swears in comments when she's being highly complimentary - lol)
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 03:38:06 AM AEST
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ooo im disturbed......hehe
no, i loved this!!! u Rock
your words were very powerful, brilliant flow and a very creative idea!! Your amazing clark!!!!!
Never cease picking up that magical pen of yours! Ur brilliant.
Hope to you fellow poet.
Rach x |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th July 2005 @ 08:08:18 PM AEST
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Hey, what can I say..
Most of what I'd've wanted to's already been said above, lol.
I love it all, written to almost perfection ..
(sent shivers up my spine, to be honest. brr)
Very vivid, deep and powerful.
A thoughtful write, with much meaning.. ;)
Keep it up, you're great at it.
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by xXcrossedXx on
Tuesday, 12th July 2005 @ 10:07:22 AM AEST
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This was more phenominal than the last time I read this! I just love that ending, it brings everything together and makes the poem so intense... great write once again Clark :)
.amanda. |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by GurlyTye on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 12:36:58 PM AEST
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| another painfully beautiful peice...Your work is almost soothing to read when i myself is in a dark mood |
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Re: Bleeding Art
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 01:55:16 PM AEST
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deepest deep and so vivid the imagery,
hugs n' love nessa
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