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Array ( [sid] => 99576 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Drowning [time] => 2005-06-29 11:02:11 [hometext] => The world sometimes gets a little heavy. Some heaviness produced this write. [bodytext] => Made myself to available.
Opened myself up wide.
Was washed away today
in the heavily polluted tide.

Tried to grasp a safety line.
My hands were burned raw.
Sharks swim in these waters.
Waiting for the ice to thaw.

Try to keep my head above...water
just so I can breathe.
It's a wicked world we live in.
In that you must believe.

Laura Horner
6-29-05 [comments] => 6 [counter] => 145 [topic] => 61 [informant] => deadheadpoet [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )

Drowning

Contributed by deadheadpoet on Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 11:02:11 AM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

Made myself to available.
Opened myself up wide.
Was washed away today
in the heavily polluted tide.

Tried to grasp a safety line.
My hands were burned raw.
Sharks swim in these waters.
Waiting for the ice to thaw.

Try to keep my head above...water
just so I can breathe.
It's a wicked world we live in.
In that you must believe.

Laura Horner
6-29-05

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Re: Drowning (User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 11:24:02 AM AEST
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Wow...well done!! I'm loving your expression in this write...Your emotions are captured so wonderfully in this piece. Great descriptive qualities, which provided for a clear visual...
Really good job!
Scorp.

Re: Drowning (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 11:58:58 AM AEST
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a great poem, hang in there, ...i think the birds must know something as they are always happily singing and chirping no matter what we humans go through... {holds her finger up to the bloody birds lol} hugs n' love nessa

@->>->:-

Re: Drowning (User Rating: 1 )
by DorianChambers on Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 03:46:57 PM AEST
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Beautiful and never ending portrayal of a world on the brink of 2morrow yet lacking the values of yesterday, very nice poem my sister laura . . .

peace 2u 4 ever woodstock

Ben

Re: Drowning (User Rating: 1 )
by Willofree on Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 10:51:15 AM AEST
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Succinct and to the point. Very well said on trials and tribulations of life using good analagies, which add to the vividness of your imagery. In dealing with heaviness it is always good to make sure we are not carrying any unnecessary bricks on our back.

Good write, Laura my friend

Will

Re: Drowning (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 6th July 2005 @ 08:29:17 PM AEST
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Good write
I hope by you letting this out
it took some wight off your
shoulders.
The second stanza very deep
made me open up my brain
wait I smell something burning
oh know that was my mind its not
use to thinking. LOL "MUH!!!!!!!
You sexy lil hippy you

Re: Drowning (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 06:21:55 PM AEST
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OH Laura .. this was painful to read, sis. SO painful.

I hear ya loud and clear in this and can feel your
anguish as if it were my very own. Your words hit
home .. without exception!!

The only thing I can offer is .. I believe we need the
darkness to appreciate the light, yeah?

*hugs*

~MG

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