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[aid] => mick
[title] => Beaten
[time] => 2005-06-25 20:48:13
[hometext] => Wrote this for a friend who just got out of an abusive relationship...Seen through her eyes
[bodytext] => My face shining black and blue
another gesture of love from you
Quite the show you put on last night
showed up; fists swinging, looking to fight
Man, I'm hurting---you got me good
my friends tried to help, but they never understood
Bad move last night; you showed your cards
smacking me around---you think you're hard?!??
Well my friends didn't know, but now they do
they wondered why in the hell I broke up with you
Thought they were helping, trying to intervene
what you displayed to them was nothing short of obscene
Drunk, distorted, not thinking right, you accuse me of a fling
LMFAO---you know damn well I haven't done a thing!
I used to love you, more than I ever thought I could
gave you more chances than a smarter woman would
Well that love is dead, much like my dignity
I hope you burn in hell for all infinity!!!!
I'll take my bruised ego and move on
I'm packing up baby...cause I'm gone.
*I'll clarify again that this is about a friend, and she has left the guy already.*
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Beaten
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hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 08:48:13 PM in AEST
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My face shining black and blue
another gesture of love from you
Quite the show you put on last night
showed up; fists swinging, looking to fight
Man, I'm hurting---you got me good
my friends tried to help, but they never understood
Bad move last night; you showed your cards
smacking me around---you think you're hard?!??
Well my friends didn't know, but now they do
they wondered why in the hell I broke up with you
Thought they were helping, trying to intervene
what you displayed to them was nothing short of obscene
Drunk, distorted, not thinking right, you accuse me of a fling
LMFAO---you know damn well I haven't done a thing!
I used to love you, more than I ever thought I could
gave you more chances than a smarter woman would
Well that love is dead, much like my dignity
I hope you burn in hell for all infinity!!!!
I'll take my bruised ego and move on
I'm packing up baby...cause I'm gone.
*I'll clarify again that this is about a friend, and she has left the guy already.*
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Re: Beaten
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 09:00:58 PM AEST
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i'm sorry that your friend had to put up with this... but i am glad she broke up with him and told you and your other friends!! this was a good poem... i liked it! keep up the good work!!
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 09:09:17 PM AEST
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gREAT poem Scorp, awesomely portrayed
~Clark |
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Re: Beaten
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 09:10:35 PM AEST
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a bit rougher than most of your poems, but enjoyable nontheless. its good that she finally left, but its good that she now knows the right thing to do in that situation. sometimes theres all the reasons to stay and to go at the same time, and the voice of reason is lost, but thats when you can only listen to your heart. too true,
"I used to love you, more than I ever thought I could
gave you more chances than a smarter woman would" |
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Re: Beaten
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by CarolinaBlue on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 09:20:36 PM AEST
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great poem! i too was once where your friend used to be and although the choice seems easy to people on the outside, leaving someone you loved is still one of the hardest things to do and in that situation sometimes harder than usual. 2 thumbs up to your friend for finding the strength to move on.
Robyn |
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Re: Beaten
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by jyssvw22 on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 09:25:33 PM AEST
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| scorp, this was a great write, you freind is a brave women, countless numbers of women being domestically abused dont know how or wont get out of the situation, your freind may have taken a hit, and that sucks, but she seems like a strong women who can say enough is enough, i wish her well. |
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Re: Beaten
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 25th June 2005 @ 10:07:39 PM AEST
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| Very touching and powerful!!! Another great write from the Scorp! |
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Re: Beaten
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by xXx_Fem_Fatale_xXx on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 07:09:48 AM AEST
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Will never ever understand why people feel the need to battle n fight with their loved one. What is there to gain?...Absolutely nothing! People gain more by giving love and respect not by beating up and abuse others.
Lots of respect to your friend, as I know how hard it is to walk out on a spouse ya love dearly tho they are abusing you in one way or the other. Hard stuff......
Well written Scorp....perfectly worded for your friend. Lots of strenght to her and finding herself back and moving on to a better life.
Huggssss,
Nats. |
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Re: Beaten
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by brew on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 12:18:23 PM AEST
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You have a lot of powerful emotion in this. yes, dont take crap. We are all people, and all deserve the best we can get and need. Dont stup to a lower level. Yes, love is blind....but not that blind.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Brew~ |
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 26th June 2005 @ 04:16:05 PM AEST
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There is no excuse to hurt some one like this. I am so pleased that your friend has seen him for what he is. Her life will now move forward and she will meet another love who will show her the respect she so rightly deserves.
Fantastic write
love Angelxxxxx |
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Re: Beaten
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by wizard on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 12:50:00 AM AEST
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glad to hear your freind is out of that situation.
although sad, the poem was nicely written...with a happy ending.
wiz |
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Re: Beaten
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by Willofree on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 10:36:43 AM AEST
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Well Scorp, this is a very powerful rendition of what this other person encountered. The poem is a powerful statement of what this woman went through. Sharing it helps bring more awareness to this important issue.
Well done, Scorp
Will |
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Re: Beaten
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by Dorkfish on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 12:30:12 PM AEST
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| That is so sad, but very good. |
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Re: Beaten
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by boobiepeach on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 12:45:24 PM AEST
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i have been there. not a fun place to be. very real write.
peach |
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Re: Beaten
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 04:43:05 PM AEST
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Truth in the final line I HOPE!!
My God!!
My heart aches for you..
I hope all is well today Scorp..
If I could, with a wave of a hand, make all your pain go away..
I surely would my friend.
(and with the other hand, wave him away, that would be a profit as well..)
Thoughts And Prayers To You..
(kissin' you gently on the cheek)
B |
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Re: Beaten
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 15th July 2005 @ 10:59:07 PM AEST
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| Had a man a long, long time ago. Drank. Mean as hell. Didn't take too long, to leave that scene once he resorted to physical violence. Glad your friend was a strong sister. At the time I didn't feel too strong, but looking back all these years later. I was strong as hell, and glad of it. Got me a sweet deadhead now. Life is good. "the bus come by and I got on" Peace. Laura |
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