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Array ( [sid] => 99047 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Cause of Death--Her Mirror [time] => 2005-06-23 02:07:53 [hometext] => I just wrote this today, but somehow it's become my favorite poem. [bodytext] => They say her life must rearrange.
They tell her that she has to change.
She used to have fun in this world.
Now everyone’s just screaming at her;

“Be PERFECT, be right!
Your teeth MUST be spotless white!
Live up to OUR expectations!
We don’t WANT your explanations!
Don’t DENY us!
BE like us!
We’re here to make YOU happy,
so stop BEING so damn SAPPY!
CHANGE your clothes!
Dress like THESE hoes!
BRUSH your hair!
Put makeup THERE!
DATE this boy,
don’t PLAY with toys!
You HAVE to exercise,
and HAVE great thighs!
PUT this on and PAINT your lips!
Now DANCE around and SHAKE your hips!

She doesn’t want to be this way,
she can’t survive here if she stays.
She discovers a totally different means,
packs herself up and decides to leave.

What’s THIS, why aren’t you DONE?!
I KNEW I shouldn’t have LEFT you alone!
Your SKIN’S still crappy!
Your nails are NAPPY!
Your CLOTHES aren’t pressed!
Your HAIR’S a mess!
What’s THIS red liquid on your BED?!
Why the HELL are you dead?!
After all we’ve DONE for you!
You could have, at least, SHINED your shoes!
You STAINED your sheets!
I can’t believe you DID this feat!
Do you know how MUCH this will cost!
ALL my money, it’s a MAJOR loss!
Now, get EVERYTHING arranged!
You MUST find someone to HELP you change!
And DO hurry, I have no more time,
to waste with such a STUPID crime!

I don’t know if you fully understand,
so let me put you two hand in hand.
Let’s see if I can make this clearer.
The cause of death, was her mirror. [comments] => 2 [counter] => 185 [topic] => 61 [informant] => acidicblasphemy [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )
Cause of Death--Her Mirror

Contributed by acidicblasphemy on Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 02:07:53 AM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles



They say her life must rearrange.
They tell her that she has to change.
She used to have fun in this world.
Now everyone’s just screaming at her;

“Be PERFECT, be right!
Your teeth MUST be spotless white!
Live up to OUR expectations!
We don’t WANT your explanations!
Don’t DENY us!
BE like us!
We’re here to make YOU happy,
so stop BEING so damn SAPPY!
CHANGE your clothes!
Dress like THESE hoes!
BRUSH your hair!
Put makeup THERE!
DATE this boy,
don’t PLAY with toys!
You HAVE to exercise,
and HAVE great thighs!
PUT this on and PAINT your lips!
Now DANCE around and SHAKE your hips!

She doesn’t want to be this way,
she can’t survive here if she stays.
She discovers a totally different means,
packs herself up and decides to leave.

What’s THIS, why aren’t you DONE?!
I KNEW I shouldn’t have LEFT you alone!
Your SKIN’S still crappy!
Your nails are NAPPY!
Your CLOTHES aren’t pressed!
Your HAIR’S a mess!
What’s THIS red liquid on your BED?!
Why the HELL are you dead?!
After all we’ve DONE for you!
You could have, at least, SHINED your shoes!
You STAINED your sheets!
I can’t believe you DID this feat!
Do you know how MUCH this will cost!
ALL my money, it’s a MAJOR loss!
Now, get EVERYTHING arranged!
You MUST find someone to HELP you change!
And DO hurry, I have no more time,
to waste with such a STUPID crime!

I don’t know if you fully understand,
so let me put you two hand in hand.
Let’s see if I can make this clearer.
The cause of death, was her mirror.




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Re: Cause of Death--Her Mirror (User Rating: 1 )
by Arannon on Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 09:59:20 AM AEST
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I liked this poem very much, up until the last stanza. The lines flowed very smoothly, and the shouted emphasis fit. I didn't understand the last line very much, though.

But overall, very good.


Re: Cause of Death--Her Mirror (User Rating: 1 )
by EVERxSOxSWEET on Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 01:13:12 AM AEST
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nice poem, how you capitalized things really made it speak more..if that made sense? ah, well it was a wonderful poem and i enjoyed reading it.




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