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[aid] => mick
[title] => The Forgotten One
[time] => 2005-06-20 21:59:54
[hometext] => This poem is dedicated to everyone who knows how it feels...
[bodytext] => You the one whose name I bear,
Though now you're never seen,
I've always heard "life isn't fair",
Now I know what they mean
You turned your back so long ago,
As if you had the choice,
For years your love I wouldn't know,
Nor would I hear your voice
I'd look around at all the kids
with Fathers hand in theirs,
Wondering why you kept yours hid
throughout my blooming years
Though now I'm grown I still look back
at the damage that you've done,
And now your love again I lack,
For I am the forgotten one
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[score] => 25
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => SadPoetry
)
The Forgotten One
Contributed by
wizard
on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 09:59:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You the one whose name I bear,
Though now you're never seen,
I've always heard "life isn't fair",
Now I know what they mean
You turned your back so long ago,
As if you had the choice,
For years your love I wouldn't know,
Nor would I hear your voice
I'd look around at all the kids
with Fathers hand in theirs,
Wondering why you kept yours hid
throughout my blooming years
Though now I'm grown I still look back
at the damage that you've done,
And now your love again I lack,
For I am the forgotten one
Copyright ©
wizard
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2005-06-20 21:59:54]
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 10:06:31 PM AEST
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| my father left my family at 2. so i cant even remember anything about him. i only know what ive been told, which amounts to his name and that he was (a few not so nice words). very good poem. you give subtle hints of who you are refering to, and then you blatantly say it for those who did not get it before, very well done. |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by MorningDove on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 10:16:27 PM AEST
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| I was blessed not to suffer this. But it seems the largest majority of children are now. it does leave them lacking in love, confidence, and many other important areas of their lives if there was not a strong adult somewhere in the family that took a strong interest. I am so sorry you had to be subject to this in your life. Blessings to you. Rita |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 01:01:58 AM AEST
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Its really a very sad write.
I never really knew my father he died when i was only 3 so i never knew what he was like.
anyways awsome write. |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 06:50:01 AM AEST
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This write is laden with saddness bro..
I'm right along side you in this..
I have recently been tossing
and turning
over this very subject..
needless to say, I am no longer
bereft about the whole thing..
this sure does put it more into focus for me..
wow.. an amazing write for sure..
5 stars on this one..(I think your best yet)
love..
B |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by brew on
Tuesday, 21st June 2005 @ 09:13:00 AM AEST
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That was a saddening write.......like being lonely. But, liked what you put into it.the emotions, and all. It happens to ppl for reasons. Thanks for sharing a piece of the heart.
Brew~ |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by Masked_Man on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 07:15:55 PM AEST
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(shakes head grimmly and offers a hand in comfort)
many sad thoughts ran through my head while reading this one. Becoming a parent is a gift no matter what the circumstances. to know you've a child and not WANT to care is mind boggling to me.
Many warm thx to you for sharing.
MM |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 28th June 2005 @ 11:24:30 PM AEST
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Very sad and so touching...Like Rita...I have been blessed.... but I have seen so many kids suffer this fate and this poem touched me to the core...
Thank you for sharing it...
Jenni |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 02:11:27 PM AEST
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This is terribly sad to read Wiz...I am very close with my Dad, so I can't relate myself. I can only imagine how hard it would be for you. You expressed your pain well in this piece, straight from the heart...Nicely done, and if you don't mind me saying...I think HE should be the forgotten one...
Scorp. |
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th February 2006 @ 06:49:07 PM AEST
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Dearest Paul,
I know I already shared with you how touched I was at
this piece, but I am compelled to comment here. It is just
simply so very heart wrenching. Not only the sentiment of
your words, but the memories they conjure up as well.
Stunning work, hun, if only because you've managed to
evoke so much emotion from within your readers.
*heartfelt hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: The Forgotten One
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 15th January 2007 @ 05:16:27 PM AEST
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Dearest Paul I read your work and it leaves me with such a sad & heavy heart. They never realize the pain & damage that they cause do they? I craved it and wanted so much just to hear my dad say "I Love You" just three simple words. I am left still waiting~ You had tears flood my eyes and my heart goes out to you my dear friend.
An emotional write that tugs deep at the heart strings.
much love & heartfelt hugs from ur fan/friend,
sue m |
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