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[aid] => mick
[title] => Spiked Life
[time] => 2005-06-18 21:36:14
[hometext] => i want feedback... good or bad i encourage a comment.... i think its one of my better pieces... please and thank you....... ~jennie*
[bodytext] => carry this guilt and carry this pain
all of this sorrow and all this disdain
follow the path made by others gone wrong
leading to a place where no one belongs
im falling apart and falling out
built by remorse and created through doubt
saturate me in a wave of burnt noise
a water of prone and a water of poise
they've spiked the life and im getting high
heavy and thick is becoming my mind
fingers of chilled bone and cold flesh
into my dead skin they slice and thresh
weary my eyes my lids close slow
drowning in water, under i go...
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Spiked Life
Contributed by
blue_angel
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Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 09:36:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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carry this guilt and carry this pain
all of this sorrow and all this disdain
follow the path made by others gone wrong
leading to a place where no one belongs
im falling apart and falling out
built by remorse and created through doubt
saturate me in a wave of burnt noise
a water of prone and a water of poise
they've spiked the life and im getting high
heavy and thick is becoming my mind
fingers of chilled bone and cold flesh
into my dead skin they slice and thresh
weary my eyes my lids close slow
drowning in water, under i go...
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Re: Spiked Life
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by sprinter27 on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 09:43:20 PM AEST
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good and bad from me: 1st, awesome poem, jennie!! l loved it. and 2nd, i can swim and i'll jump in after you. won't let my best friend drown.... i'm sorry, i'm not like that!! i care about you jennie!!! you and kc are my best friends!!! i don't let friends kill themselves or drown themselves!!! but otherwise, the poem was great!!! keep up the great work and see you thursday, right? you and kc can come, so please do!!! talk to you later, jennie and keep up the awesome work!!!
your BFF,
~sprints, hockeygal, and/or shelly |
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Re: Spiked Life
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by Wandering-Soul on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 09:53:57 PM AEST
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...I don't know what to say...this is one of the best pieces of literature I have seen in my life. Have you ever considered a career in this genre? If not, I think you should.
I also sense a great deal of pain in this peom, like something weighs you down. Like I like to say, it are those who feel weak that are strong. Stay strong and hold together.
Good luck. |
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Re: Spiked Life
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by Wandering-Soul on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 09:54:20 PM AEST
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...I don't know what to say...this is one of the best pieces of literature I have seen in my life. Have you ever considered a career in this genre? If not, I think you should.
I also sense a great deal of pain in this peom, like something weighs you down. Like I like to say, it are those who feel weak that are strong. Stay strong and hold together.
Good luck. |
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Re: Spiked Life
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by visualizing_life on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 10:11:01 PM AEST
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| im not sure i have words to describe what i feel about this poem...the words are so powerful and express so much emotion in them...this is definitly one of the best poems i think ive read...keep writing and dont let anything get you down....vl |
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Re: Spiked Life
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by Jaycee on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 10:21:47 PM AEST
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Jennie, truly a heartwrenching piece. Do not let others drag you down in your misery. You are the flower that blooms and thrives in the concrete jungle. I know it is hard for you but do not give up the fight! Sprints will bail you out and the rest of us will haul you both out if we need to!
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Re: Spiked Life
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by PoisonousPyscho on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 11:51:11 PM AEST
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| omg...wow...idk if this is a compliment or anda insult or anythign liek that but i really think we can relate with out poetry..mines dark..but in a slighty different way...lol i wish we could post more thne 3 a day...i have millions =) i love this poem soo much !!! |
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Re: Spiked Life
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 19th June 2005 @ 12:38:30 PM AEST
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| Jennie this was a good write and very visual display of your pain and emotion. Thank you for sharing your pain and thoughts through your writes. Your in my thoughts and keep your head up as I know you will. Keep up the writes they are good for me to read and see that they are others that think like me and I’m not alone, you just write it much better then me. Take care Jennie and I look forward to more of your writes. Bye for now….Steve |
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