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bloody wrists
Contributed by
Tears_of_my_heart
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Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 06:42:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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i slit my wirsts and all you say is "stop that i love you"
i slice my arms and all you do is hug me
i try to die but all u say is "i need you"
can you not see that i need help
can you not see that i am going crazy
can you not see that i need you 2
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Re: bloody wrists
(User Rating: 1 ) by Doriens_Picture on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 06:55:36 PM AEST (User
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but i need something else
something that i just dont know
its not that i dont care
about how you feel
its that i cant help this pain
it is just all too real
hopes it helps |
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Re: bloody wrists
(User Rating: 1 ) by poet70 on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 07:48:57 PM AEST (User
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Is ths an important poem to you? Because you did not put much into it, your i is small not capitlized, and 2 should have been spelled out, because if this was a poem and not a letter, or poem to just get SOMEONE"S attention it could have been real good. I just don't see where you took much time. I see your ability to do great writing, just try harder to avoid typos. Don't think I am slashing this poem cos I am not, I liked it for being a dark poem, just wished there would not have been all the typos, cos without them it would have made the poem even better,
Good Wishes,
Tammi ( keep on writing) |
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Re: bloody wrists
(User Rating: 1 ) by Baby_Grl on
Thursday, 23rd June 2005 @ 12:43:42 AM AEST (User
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That was good, nice one.
Baby_Grl
P.S. Keep it up. |
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