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[title] => Forget Me
[time] => 2005-06-17 20:16:34
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[bodytext] => Forget Me
Love me for someone I'm not,
And then maybe you will
Finally leave me alone.
Your feelings only rot
With what I still
Will not atone
For,
Because you are
Nothing to me at all.
I never was one to adore
Memories that have only marred
My mind till all sanity was beaten into walls.
Leave me alone so that I can't breathe
The acidic air of polluted concepts.
Ever listening to you was never
A good idea for me to believe
Since you're so inept
To even matter.
Love the memories,
But forget me.
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Forget Me
Contributed by
Essentially9
on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:16:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Forget Me
Love me for someone I'm not,
And then maybe you will
Finally leave me alone.
Your feelings only rot
With what I still
Will not atone
For,
Because you are
Nothing to me at all.
I never was one to adore
Memories that have only marred
My mind till all sanity was beaten into walls.
Leave me alone so that I can't breathe
The acidic air of polluted concepts.
Ever listening to you was never
A good idea for me to believe
Since you're so inept
To even matter.
Love the memories,
But forget me.
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Essentially9
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Re: Forget Me
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by xXcrossedXx on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 08:29:54 PM AEST
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Cute structure, very deep poem. I really liked this especially the ending it has so much impact!
Amazing write!
--amanda-- |
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Re: Forget Me
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by Willofree on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 09:15:48 PM AEST
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The design of the poem is interesting the way it expands and contracts, which may or may not be significant as to a correlation with the relationship. Anyway it sounds like you, out of disgust, tell him to love you for who he wants you to be, as he isn't loving you for who you are. Sounds like a very toxic relationship....one to distance yourself from
A very descriptive and candid write, with very powerful wording
Good write, Jennifer
Will |
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Re: Forget Me
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by Man_On_High on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 09:50:59 PM AEST
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A most intrepid write..
very brave indeed-
your anger becomes you..
powerful and well written.
last two lines...awesome!
I love this write!
As always..
Billy
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Re: Forget Me
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 09:57:31 PM AEST
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this is so cool, Jenn. It is like you are telling him take the ashes and put them in this urn and see all feeling are dead. How in the heck did you do that?? This is brilliant, if I may say so, really. Somepeople just don't understand NO, no matter how many times you yell it. Great write.
Rita |
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Re: Forget Me
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 12:29:12 AM AEST
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911 would be easier to 4get , an amazing
request considering the beauty and style
with which this poem is written with, as
always your in true form as is your poetry . . .
Ben |
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Re: Forget Me
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by waos on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 12:59:24 AM AEST
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That was fabulous. I loved it and adored it and want to read it
again and again. Thank you for posting this, it's awesome to run
into your poetry. Thanks again! Awesome structure and word
choice!
~Kara |
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Re: Forget Me
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by AnastasiaN on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 03:54:01 AM AEST
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| as usual i am impressed. the scheme was difficult but the words you chose made it all work...you're crazy like that. i enjoyed it thoroughly keep them coming like i know you will. |
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Re: Forget Me
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by emystar on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 07:35:45 AM AEST
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Awesome !
wow
very creative thinking and writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Forget Me
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 18th June 2005 @ 11:56:32 AM AEST
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wow girl this write is deep.
great write hun
hugs |
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Re: Forget Me
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by boobiepeach on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 05:38:37 PM AEST
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i loked this a lot. great write.
and i feel ya!
nat |
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Re: Forget Me
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by Dorkfish on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 05:47:29 PM AEST
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| I like it a lot! Good job! |
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Re: Forget Me
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 01:56:17 AM AEST
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Ouch! Someone got stab-happy : )
Rich emotion in this write Jen...you really drive home the point (!!!) I can feel the resentment in your words, and that ending is the final sting!
Scorp.
(Thinking, who could forget you after that ??) ; ) |
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Re: Forget Me
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by tears_of_blood on
Saturday, 5th November 2005 @ 08:36:56 PM AEST
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| that was so good strong poem you made the words stand out with meaning good job. |
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