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[title] => I Can Never Replace You
[time] => 2005-06-04 21:40:00
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[bodytext] => I Can Never Replace You
You see my teardrops
Displayed on the page,
And your heart is not
One I can replace.
You're one that cared
When no one else
Was there.
I wish you never saw my tears,
Because then maybe you
Wouldn't have taken my fears
Of never getting through.
So I mark the page
Of the poem that you dedicated
In lasting memory,
And I try not to put my life to waste
With your wishes unwonted
By everyone else but me,
But it's hard to feel you no longer there
While you're in heaven, where I'll never be,
Because I'm not sure if you still care.
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I Can Never Replace You
Contributed by
Essentially9
on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 09:40:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I Can Never Replace You
You see my teardrops
Displayed on the page,
And your heart is not
One I can replace.
You're one that cared
When no one else
Was there.
I wish you never saw my tears,
Because then maybe you
Wouldn't have taken my fears
Of never getting through.
So I mark the page
Of the poem that you dedicated
In lasting memory,
And I try not to put my life to waste
With your wishes unwonted
By everyone else but me,
But it's hard to feel you no longer there
While you're in heaven, where I'll never be,
Because I'm not sure if you still care.
Copyright ©
Essentially9
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2005-06-04 21:40:00]
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 09:46:59 PM AEST
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great write jen, as always you write something that is eartfelt and compelling..great job
~Clark |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:39:16 AM AEST
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very heartfelt and real.
once again you did an awsome job. |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by Sinned on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 10:27:38 AM AEST
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Essentially9
Its essentual I read your poems.
Your thoughts never bring me down
This is sad,but true to some
Life goes on
and you will write of something new
Be it happy or something blue
I just enjoy so much written by
you
Your friend
Sinned |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:44:37 PM AEST
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Beautiful saddness friend..
your longing here is very evident..
great write.
B
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by pixie on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 12:56:10 PM AEST
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such a moving and deeply emoitonal poem, you have a real talent for grabbing the readerss attention from start to finish and leave them breathless and wanting more at the end
pix xx |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 01:46:56 PM AEST
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A deeply moving peice of writting and u r showing through well done, and if i may
add, very intence, welcom 2 the club . . .
Ben
aka. Dorian Chambers |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 03:22:48 PM AEST
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| This was a very good poem, I like all of the emotions you expressed in it. SLipSiX. |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by AMph on
Sunday, 5th June 2005 @ 04:00:10 PM AEST
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| What's meant will always find a way... Great write! |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 06:38:01 AM AEST
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Well now, I like this one.
A bit softer than most of your other writes, less dark, yet sad and somehow deeply sensitive.
Hmmm...and don't sell yourself short on heaven either, underneath that darkness is a good heart. |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 14th June 2005 @ 07:35:42 PM AEST
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Jen, this is so sad and so touching..The title is excellent....
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 08:57:07 AM AEST
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Great write. Pain and beauty once again. I love your writing. The last stanza is written amazingly and with great structure.
--amanda-- |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 05:13:18 PM AEST
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This is a moving poem. Grief, and pain, and regret, and love, all brought together with skill and grace. A beautiful piece.
Andrew |
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Re: I Can Never Replace You
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 25th July 2005 @ 04:38:05 PM AEST
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Very poignant...a softer sorrow to this piece, but deeper somehow...This write has a more honest quality to it then some of your poems. I feel like you lifted your 'veil' so to speak...Good use of expression.
Scorp. |
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