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Array ( [sid] => 96826 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Can't Hold On [time] => 2005-06-04 15:14:30 [hometext] => Please read and comment [bodytext] => I can't take this
it is tearing me apart
Living without you is like
living without air
I cannot breathe
This just isn't fair
They tore us apart
and broke my heart
They don't know what they did to me
and they don't realize they are slowly killing me
How are you?
Are you getting by without me just fine?
Or are you suffering as much as me?
I love you
How much do you love me?
I love you so much that each moment I am without you
I die a little bit more.
The sun is shining, but I do not feel it's warmth
The air is sweet to the taste and soft to the touch, but
its pleasure goes unnoticed
In the midst of a mesmerizing spring
my world feels like a bitter cold winter
I am hiding in the white forest
in a hollow tree
There you will find me, no longer alive
My soul has been stolen
My light no longer shines
I have been without air for so long
I just couldn't hold on


~Kortnie~ [comments] => 2 [counter] => 164 [topic] => 43 [informant] => justme03 [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => oops )
Can't Hold On

Contributed by justme03 on Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 03:14:30 PM in AEST
Topic: oops



I can't take this
it is tearing me apart
Living without you is like
living without air
I cannot breathe
This just isn't fair
They tore us apart
and broke my heart
They don't know what they did to me
and they don't realize they are slowly killing me
How are you?
Are you getting by without me just fine?
Or are you suffering as much as me?
I love you
How much do you love me?
I love you so much that each moment I am without you
I die a little bit more.
The sun is shining, but I do not feel it's warmth
The air is sweet to the taste and soft to the touch, but
its pleasure goes unnoticed
In the midst of a mesmerizing spring
my world feels like a bitter cold winter
I am hiding in the white forest
in a hollow tree
There you will find me, no longer alive
My soul has been stolen
My light no longer shines
I have been without air for so long
I just couldn't hold on


~Kortnie~




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Re: Can't Hold On (User Rating: 1 )
by KayeRains on Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 04:42:52 PM AEST
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Has potential but needs work. Good luck with it.


Re: Can't Hold On (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 6th June 2005 @ 10:21:21 AM AEST
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very well written. I can relate to this poem and that makes it even better. I'm glad you liked rebirth so much. keep up the good work ^_^




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