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Scorpio
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 09:08:02 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Fire and water should not mix for good reason
it goes deeper than month, day, or even the season
Water drowns out fire and creates alot of smoke
those caught in the ambush wheeze and choke
You tried to let out a roar, but came out a pathetic cry
a Scorp is hard to handle---weak of mind need not apply
You think you know me cause you read a little poem
well honey, so you know; I keep the good **** at home
Might I suggest you look up 'Scorpio' and have a little read
and from their words of wisdom, you'd be smart to take heed
You thought you'd play an innocent game...
set me up for failure so you could point and blame
The phoenix has fallen; the eagle clipped of wings
but lookout!! Cause here comes that deadly sting....
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by jyssvw22 on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 09:11:42 PM AEST (User
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wow you are good,all i can say is that you real good
i loved this write |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by sprinter27 on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 09:17:37 PM AEST (User
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awesome write!! jeez, this is really good. i like it a LOT!!! i wish i could write like this. and i like how you relate it to the scorpio. it makes lots of sense to me. keep up the good work!!!
~sprints |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by Doriens_Picture on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 10:07:46 PM AEST (User
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hehe another uber kewl write my girl and I are sagitarious get mad we kick someone and if they are smaller than us we step on them hehe
i guess thats why we get along so well |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 10:35:44 PM AEST (User
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A beautiful peice of poetry, very creative . . .
Benedetto John Papa |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by MorningDove on
Sunday, 29th May 2005 @ 10:59:18 PM AEST (User
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I love this one, Scorp. I don't play head games either. Give em a sting they won't ever forget. You go, lady!
Rita |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by mylastwords on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 12:50:50 AM AEST (User
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hey,
Awesome write, I'm a scorpio and I know how to sting people! Just ask people who have done me wrong! Expressed really well, nice rhythm.
xxooxx mylastwords xxooxx |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 07:02:38 AM AEST (User
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Now that was totally awesome. Now talk about feeling the emotion; I really could with this one. Very kewl. :) |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by Sinned on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 08:35:48 AM AEST (User
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Hauntedscorp
Build you up
and put you down
Sorry I'm no dope
I read your poem
Enjoyed it too
warning heeded
and taken home
I reconize talent
from afar
and near
You are respected
You are truly a poet
Sinned |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by ladyfawn on
Monday, 30th May 2005 @ 11:45:38 AM AEST (User
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i love this poem, had to smile all the way through as im a double scorpio, lol, ...excellent style and flow here, hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 10:43:23 AM AEST (User
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Remind me not to get on your bad side. :-) Seriously, I've been bit by a few scorpios in my time (my dad was one). All I know about you is that you write good poetry and seem playful at times. Dunno about the failure, you have succeeded in a short time here gaining fans where many get washed up on the sand. Good write! |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by secretwind on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 08:46:59 PM AEST (User
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BEWARE
The sting of the scorpio is deadly
yes.......
The Wind |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by i_heart_herby on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 05:37:32 PM AEST (User
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Definatly late a great write, I'd hate to make you mad. lol You are an excellent poet...two thumbs up |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th June 2005 @ 05:55:30 PM AEST (User
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Hmmm yes...a credit to the sign.
Powerful and angry, very emotive piece fellow scorpio! |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by remote on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 01:27:01 PM AEST (User
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Now I know what to email someone who messes with me. |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th July 2006 @ 05:52:38 PM AEST (User
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Now you know ... you KNOW I couldn't let this one pass me by ...
"weak of mind need not apply"
God, I love that line alone!!! But with all that it is surrounded by, this
piece SCREAMS scorpio!! Aptly titled, hun and wow .. I detect
something vexes thee? lol Don't mince words, scorp ... tell
us how you really feel!! lol
Awesome write. Positively bursting with emotion, and as a
scorpio, I know it's better OUT than IN.
~Breezy
(glad your days seem to be better ..) |
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Re: Scorpio
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadreckoning1983 on
Thursday, 30th October 2014 @ 11:54:59 PM AEST (User
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This poem is sexy, big, bold, and sassy. I like it! I assume the choked roar and reference to a fire sign means it was a Leo, huh? Is there ever an "Innocent" game, like we dont know what we are doing?
but lookout!! Cause here comes that deadly sting....
This poem is so damn sexy. That ending is sooo good |
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