|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Array
(
[sid] => 95736
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => My Soul Seeks Help!
[time] => 2005-05-25 15:49:03
[hometext] => just a poem of how im feeling inside right now...
[bodytext] => I walk over to the window to see the dreadful world
On a ferris-wheel that's spinning trying not to hurl
I drift off into another place to find what i'm looking for
But i am cut off by a screaming voice followed by a slamming door
My head just wants to burst from all of the aching pain
And what do i get out of this not anything close to gain
It aggrivates me to know that i won't go anywhere in life
Without a bad thought in mind and my trusty little knife
To be able to say i'm closer to a knife then to my own mother
Brings such a horrible feeling in me unlike any other
But somehow it makes me stop and think before i go too deep
That i need to find some one who cares before i go to sleep
My cards haven't been played out well ever since day one
Not having a mother that cares for you is truly no fun
But to forget it all i just lay back and give myself a little cut
Not too shallow but not too deep yet still my question is what
What if i went too deep would i be doing the right thing
By ending my dreadful life so soon with this painful little sting
Not scared but not brave enough to do this to myself
I get to thinking about the one who cares and the knife goes back to the shelf
Please help please help my soul seeks your help!
[comments] => 8
[counter] => 470
[topic] => 36
[informant] => Kay-Kay
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 12
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
)
My Soul Seeks Help!
Contributed by
Kay-Kay
on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 03:49:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
|
I walk over to the window to see the dreadful world
On a ferris-wheel that's spinning trying not to hurl
I drift off into another place to find what i'm looking for
But i am cut off by a screaming voice followed by a slamming door
My head just wants to burst from all of the aching pain
And what do i get out of this not anything close to gain
It aggrivates me to know that i won't go anywhere in life
Without a bad thought in mind and my trusty little knife
To be able to say i'm closer to a knife then to my own mother
Brings such a horrible feeling in me unlike any other
But somehow it makes me stop and think before i go too deep
That i need to find some one who cares before i go to sleep
My cards haven't been played out well ever since day one
Not having a mother that cares for you is truly no fun
But to forget it all i just lay back and give myself a little cut
Not too shallow but not too deep yet still my question is what
What if i went too deep would i be doing the right thing
By ending my dreadful life so soon with this painful little sting
Not scared but not brave enough to do this to myself
I get to thinking about the one who cares and the knife goes back to the shelf
Please help please help my soul seeks your help!
Copyright ©
Kay-Kay
... [
2005-05-25 15:49:03]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 03:53:39 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
this is a really good poem. I loved the emotion you put into it. The uncertainty and how it is all put together.
Loved it!
Looking forward to more
keep writing
keep smiling
sweetstranger |
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 04:09:19 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Yes, I know how it feels and no, you wouldn't be doing the right thing. You're not here because of others, you're here for whoever/whatever gave us life and/or for your own needs - take your pick. That said, it pays to be nice because it gives back good karma. At the same time there will always be lousy times. Let it make you strong.
(I don't normally dish out advice, but I'm telling myself the same stuff right now...)
Anyway, your rhyme is good and I like the couplets.
J. |
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by bethers_is_my_baby on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 04:12:02 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
hey great work!! i know how you feel!! keep ur head up!! good luck! keep writing:)
*~peace and love~* |
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by loveisendless on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 04:36:12 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
You sound like the kind of person that can help all others thru their worst problems,but not yourself! I too have the same problem,I'm over the knife thing though!! Cutting yourself a little,or too deep,to me is the same as love!!! Do you care a little,or fall in so deep that there's no getting out of it!!!! The knife isn't your life,it's what's in your mind!!!!! What I read tells me that you still have plenty of room up in there to convince yourself that you are your own master of your life,not a knife!!!!!!
Just remember,suicide is 99.99% selfish & is letting all that care about you know that this problem got the best of you,including that heart of gold & your dimond eyes-DON'T give it the satifaction,calm down & give it to yourself by being strong & talented-like this poem!!!!!!! NUFF SAID!!!!!!!!
DAN!!!!!!!!! |
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 05:36:03 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| A very personal write and I think it's good you wrote this...Cutting doesn't work; it's a short term answer, and in the end only brings more pain...Try to find some common ground with your Mom and mend your heartache....Take Care, Scorp. |
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by ElatedNBliss on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 05:42:30 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| crazy how we don't want to hurt the ones who hurt us...so in turn we hurt ourselves... and in the end the question is are u ashamed of what u did? did you make yourself this way or did life do it??? ahhh too many questions if u ask me....but not gettin off the subject....loved ur poetry |
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by Shishke_Bob on
Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 10:36:36 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
wow this is truly a sad poem and a very heart wrenching one too I dont know where you are coming from but I do know what its like to have pain, and this poem tells it so true, I do hope that you are feeling better (I will pray for you.) this is the best place to ask for help to thats what we are here for, just ask. I do hope that you are feeling better and I am looking forword to reading more from you. God bless, latter
KaBob |
|
|
Re: My Soul Seeks Help!
(User Rating: 1 )
by Kamal on
Friday, 27th January 2006 @ 01:18:53 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
YO bro I Love you man please handle life with an open heart and mind I know whats its like to feel like know one cares about your feeling but GOD is there waiting for you to turn onto him for guodance and strengh..
This pain should last long unless you like the pain you create for yourself enjoying the fact that you can find redemtion through torture...
YO please stay string fot the race of mankind becasue I will need your help one day expecially when the world begins to drift away into insanity,,, so we need every BODY.
who is healthy enpugh to fight against evil... |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
