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[aid] => Mick
[title] => You Hurt Me
[time] => 2003-01-01 05:00:00
[hometext] => First poem I've written. I don't think it's that good, but I'll try anyway. It's more angst then anything, and that's it.
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You think you now me but you have no clue.
You don’t know the real me, the things I think, the thinks I dream, the things I want.
You don’t try to know me all you care about is yourself.
I live a lie just like you, but for me I know who I am, do you?
I don’t think you do so try harder and someday maybe you’ll find yourself.
And you are but a superficial person adding to the madness of an already dark and cruel world.
You need to open your eyes.
Stop living a dream, for I am not what I seem.
I don’t know what it is to be a kid.
I live a life of endless torment.
Lies and darkness is all I know.
Dreamless sleep and innocence is all I want.
Try living a day in my shoes.
Feeling what I feel.
Enduring what I do day after day.
And maybe you’ll realize that life is not all about you.
I let you slide all the time.
I don’t yell at you and tell you your faults.
I let it all slide ‘cause you are just a mere mortal living a lie.
Who am I to judge you, for I am living a lie also.
Sadness is covered by jokes and laughs.
Sure fine whatever is a simple way to say I’m mad and not caring about the world.
I’m dead inside not caring anymore if you hurt me.
Trust is gone replaced with hope for you.
Maybe someday you’ll understand what its like to live like me.
What it’s like to feel dead and worthless.
Like your accomplishments don’t matter.
Like all you’ve done has been in vain.
You haven’t grown up yet.
You haven’t broken out of your bubble and lived the world like I have.
Your life has made you narrow mined and oblivious to the facts that stare you in the face.
You cant see past your wants and needs to see that when you gain another looses.
You take a part of me every time.
Your slowing your killing me, and you don’t even know it.
I tried to be your friend and I never told how I felt.
Never told you that your annoying voice and “problems” we’re hurting me.
Never told you about my problems.
You are nothing to me now but another person passing by.
A person who talks to me, and the shell of me responds while my brain and heart want to leave.
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[counter] => 236
[topic] => 13
[informant] => aliaschick47
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[score] => 15
[ratings] => 3
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You Hurt Me
Contributed by
aliaschick47
on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 05:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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You think you now me but you have no clue.
You don’t know the real me, the things I think, the thinks I dream, the things I want.
You don’t try to know me all you care about is yourself.
I live a lie just like you, but for me I know who I am, do you?
I don’t think you do so try harder and someday maybe you’ll find yourself.
And you are but a superficial person adding to the madness of an already dark and cruel world.
You need to open your eyes.
Stop living a dream, for I am not what I seem.
I don’t know what it is to be a kid.
I live a life of endless torment.
Lies and darkness is all I know.
Dreamless sleep and innocence is all I want.
Try living a day in my shoes.
Feeling what I feel.
Enduring what I do day after day.
And maybe you’ll realize that life is not all about you.
I let you slide all the time.
I don’t yell at you and tell you your faults.
I let it all slide ‘cause you are just a mere mortal living a lie.
Who am I to judge you, for I am living a lie also.
Sadness is covered by jokes and laughs.
Sure fine whatever is a simple way to say I’m mad and not caring about the world.
I’m dead inside not caring anymore if you hurt me.
Trust is gone replaced with hope for you.
Maybe someday you’ll understand what its like to live like me.
What it’s like to feel dead and worthless.
Like your accomplishments don’t matter.
Like all you’ve done has been in vain.
You haven’t grown up yet.
You haven’t broken out of your bubble and lived the world like I have.
Your life has made you narrow mined and oblivious to the facts that stare you in the face.
You cant see past your wants and needs to see that when you gain another looses.
You take a part of me every time.
Your slowing your killing me, and you don’t even know it.
I tried to be your friend and I never told how I felt.
Never told you that your annoying voice and “problems” we’re hurting me.
Never told you about my problems.
You are nothing to me now but another person passing by.
A person who talks to me, and the shell of me responds while my brain and heart want to leave.
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aliaschick47
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2003-01-01 05:00:00]
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 05:16:05 AM AEST
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Hello there,
This is very sad but really well said.
Very good writing.!I can relate to this in a way.
It's really sad when we are un-equally matched.
You have much potentual as a writer!
Hang tough and know that you are somebody 'cause God don't make junk!
Keep up the writing!
Very good!
PEACE, LUV, JOY,
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by EmSal on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 05:24:39 AM AEST
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I SO understand, so sad, so real, I understand perfectly. Great write, I loved it!
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 11:14:29 AM AEST
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Dear aliaschick47 @-<-<<
This is an excellent write and a rose of a poem... I felt much as you in your poem last night... I am grateful you shared this, it was exactly what I needed to read this morning...
Your writing friend always Nessa
p.s. welcome to YPDC too! |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 06:50:44 PM AEST
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Yes, I agree very good poem for the first one you've written. I'm sure a lot of ppl can relate to the feelings described in your poem and I am one of them. Great emotion and feeling.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by aliaschick47 on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 08:09:44 PM AEST
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| Thanks for reading it and actually liking it!! :-) |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by aliaschick47 on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 08:10:11 PM AEST
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| Thanks!!! |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by aliaschick47 on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 08:11:09 PM AEST
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| Thanks a lot!!! I really needed the encourgement!!! |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by aliaschick47 on
Wednesday, 1st January 2003 @ 08:11:31 PM AEST
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| Thanks!!! |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th January 2003 @ 05:02:42 PM AEST
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| I think u r very hypocritical. Habe u ever walked in thier shoes? uh....no. and if this is just another person walking by that means nothing to u, then y r u writing a poem about them? Maybe u rnt really listening. u fake it. u smile and nod, while the hole time ur thinking y rnt u asking me how i am? am i hurt, scared, or alone? But instead u sit and nod, worrying on ur own self. Take a look at ur own life. Maybe u wont b so satisfied. |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by Steve_Class on
Thursday, 16th January 2003 @ 03:53:26 PM AEST
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| I can feel the anger in this poem. It's funny how only when we get hurt that actually begin to care about ourselves and not those who hurt us. At least that's how felt. Very sad and perhaps frustrating poem. |
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Re: You Hurt Me
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by apollo on
Friday, 3rd October 2003 @ 03:04:53 PM AEST
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| that was amazing, i can not believe the descriptions you entitled in this writing. it was an amazing piece of work, and i hope you do feel that it was good, because it was! |
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