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Lost would imply I knew what I couldn't find
But one thing seems very clear to me
There is a mass of clutter within my mind

So much emotion going in and out
But only the bad appears to stay
Between my Grandad and you
I walk through my life in a fog
Night after night
Day after day

He said he thought you would marry me
That he was surprised when it didn't last
He wanted the very best for me
And in his eyes you more than passed

I don't know if you still love me
I dream of you with the hope that you might
I wonder if you ever do the same
And if I'll see you in outerspace tonight

I guess that only time will tell
What is meant to be and what's not
But maybe he knew something we didn't
Or maybe we knew and we just forgot. [comments] => 2 [counter] => 200 [topic] => 24 [informant] => stellar [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 0 [associated] => [topicname] => LoveRemembered )

Time

Contributed by stellar on Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 08:59:36 PM in AEST
Topic: LoveRemembered

Confused couldn't even describe it
Lost would imply I knew what I couldn't find
But one thing seems very clear to me
There is a mass of clutter within my mind

So much emotion going in and out
But only the bad appears to stay
Between my Grandad and you
I walk through my life in a fog
Night after night
Day after day

He said he thought you would marry me
That he was surprised when it didn't last
He wanted the very best for me
And in his eyes you more than passed

I don't know if you still love me
I dream of you with the hope that you might
I wonder if you ever do the same
And if I'll see you in outerspace tonight

I guess that only time will tell
What is meant to be and what's not
But maybe he knew something we didn't
Or maybe we knew and we just forgot.

Copyright © stellar ... [ 2005-05-22 20:59:36]
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Re: Time (User Rating: 1 )
by Fionndruinne on Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 05:48:29 PM AEST
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Very honest and well-expressed, in spite of the trying times. All the best, and keep writing!

Andrew

Re: Time (User Rating: 1 )
by rockergirl94 on Wednesday, 24th August 2005 @ 02:46:45 PM AEST
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I really really like you're second line,
"Lost would imply I knew what I couldn't find"

and also you're last line,
"Or maybe we knew and we just forgot"

They are the hard-hitting lines that jam into my head, and will come to mind when I feel like I'm looking for something, or am feeling confused.

Something you might want to try, is being a bit less specific in your poems. It's fine the way you're doing it, but if you didn't say the names of people, or explained situations so clearly, even more people would be able to identify with your poems.

I think you have massive potential.

keep writing, keep hoping
- Julie

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