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The skies are painted gray,
And the roses are glistening white.
The thorns induce the greatest pain
With blackness fading into night.
You kiss with the reddest lips,
And they are as poisonous
As the first moments of bliss
Ever felt by a heart that was
Frozen with cold compassion
From the acidic precipitation.
I wasn't willing to give in,
But you still think that when
My tears fell
They were for the happiness felt.
When I felt nothing, but hate
For the death that shall take
Me unwilling for the intimacy
Of the white rose's beauty.
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Golden Roses
Contributed by
Essentially9
on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 08:19:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Golden Roses
The skies are painted gray,
And the roses are glistening white.
The thorns induce the greatest pain
With blackness fading into night.
You kiss with the reddest lips,
And they are as poisonous
As the first moments of bliss
Ever felt by a heart that was
Frozen with cold compassion
From the acidic precipitation.
I wasn't willing to give in,
But you still think that when
My tears fell
They were for the happiness felt.
When I felt nothing, but hate
For the death that shall take
Me unwilling for the intimacy
Of the white rose's beauty.
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Re: Golden Roses
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 09:10:45 PM AEST
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Yes, well, its given a 3 stars huh?..well its better then that, some one just needs to look at the beauty of the poem, Well Jen, I like it, the ending and the metophores you used are awesome....Hmm...some people have no taste for anything good...As Always
~Clark |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 09:26:47 PM AEST
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beautiful imagery
and beautiful sadness..
love it
M.O.H. |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 10:34:10 PM AEST
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This is what I would call an abstract poem, which is something that I admire in your work. However, I don't always understand it. It appears to me to be about pain and loss; and perhaps a toxic relationship?
Impressive write, Jen
Will |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 22nd May 2005 @ 11:19:36 PM AEST
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Deep feelings within the meaning of this poem, lased with symbolisum of a torn and tattered love, your poetic prowess is 2nd 2
none . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by venkat on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 12:28:23 AM AEST
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| Very good imagery with a depth of meening..as usual with a wonderful craftmanship...love to read it again and again,,:-) venkat |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 01:44:21 AM AEST
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wow i say this poem deserve 5 stars not 3.
Amazing how you wrote this piece.
Its sad yet beautiful at the same time.
awsome |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 04:03:27 AM AEST
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*Claps like mad*
Ohh i love this, it reminds me of a movie i saw. I'm strill trying to remember the name of the movie but damn Jen this was fab LOL (God i am such a dork).
P.S. I think it's a 5 star poem not 3 *shrugs*
Jane xxx |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 06:26:19 AM AEST
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Good write... sad but so beautifully written..
Jenni |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 01:34:13 PM AEST
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Well now, where to sart?
First...WONDERFUL images!!
A dark and sinister feel to this...emotive!
And lastly I loved the way you led into each stanza from the last! Excellent job on that.
Overall....awsome as usual!!!!! |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by freckle on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 09:19:56 PM AEST
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Very nice poem....sad, but beautiful....
Carol |
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Re: Golden Roses
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 15th June 2005 @ 08:30:41 AM AEST
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This was beautiful you have a way with adding color to your poem. Amazing write.
*5 stars!
(i heard someone voted three, that is going to change very fast :) )
--amanda-- |
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