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Array ( [sid] => 94955 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Colorblind [time] => 2005-05-19 00:56:57 [hometext] => So many colors... comments plz [bodytext] => the detail so sharp
in crisp black and white
but the world's about color
and I'm lonely tonite

i'd finally deciphered the map
in a world full of hues
but charting the course
destined me to lose

people will point fingers
saying it's clearly my fault
when the treasure was in sight
slowly open the vault

i'd uncaged my eyes
and seen a world of brilliance
but the glare was too much
i was such a dunce

but i thought i could do this
and live like the rest
really wanted to live
and have a life that is best

but the world is a maze
where green is like red
Stumbling my way through
just like an airhead

the world's a dangerous place
for one colorblind
true happiness elusive
afraid I won't find

so time to close my eyes
and with my last breath
it is back to the cage
safe emotional death
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Colorblind

Contributed by Jaycee on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 12:56:57 AM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry

the detail so sharp
in crisp black and white
but the world's about color
and I'm lonely tonite

i'd finally deciphered the map
in a world full of hues
but charting the course
destined me to lose

people will point fingers
saying it's clearly my fault
when the treasure was in sight
slowly open the vault

i'd uncaged my eyes
and seen a world of brilliance
but the glare was too much
i was such a dunce

but i thought i could do this
and live like the rest
really wanted to live
and have a life that is best

but the world is a maze
where green is like red
Stumbling my way through
just like an airhead

the world's a dangerous place
for one colorblind
true happiness elusive
afraid I won't find

so time to close my eyes
and with my last breath
it is back to the cage
safe emotional death

Copyright © Jaycee ... [ 2005-05-19 00:56:57]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 01:20:55 AM AEST
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Jaycee
beautiful and well written poem It touched my heart and you dont have to be lonely, colors can brighten

Leia

Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by Jaycee on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 01:30:11 AM AEST
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Just an FYI for the readers of this. I originally had this planned for after the 6th stanza. Forgot to include it and not sure if it would fit, anyway:

for the first time in life
understand how cutters must feel
to let out the pain
a solution so real

Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by crap_snapper on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 03:49:40 AM AEST
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This is a good poem and well written. I think you did well to leave out the extra verse as for me it would have changed the mood of the poem, i enjoy the wandering melancholy with a sad ending. Color is spelt colour in England where i'm from. :)

Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 06:12:49 AM AEST
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Really heartfelt...and Leia is right..Colours can and DO brighten.... Don't focus so much on the colours..you'll see...
Jenni

Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by blowfish_jane on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 07:21:19 AM AEST
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Wow this poem is a feast for the eyes. A really wonderful written poem.

i do agree with Leila and JenniK you'll see the colors of the world if you tried your best.

Jane xxx

Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by pUnKa_RaCh on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 08:09:40 AM AEST
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AMAZING poem jaycee. ur thoughts were very tragic and touched me deeply...i kno how very blackening loneliness can be to ones soul.
just great poem
my world is black and white too...where are the magical colours

Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by Fears on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 09:33:09 AM AEST
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a very touching and meaningful write! Colors are vfery interesting so I hope that soon We all see them the way they are supposed to be

~Fears~~

Re: Colorblind (User Rating: 1 )
by blue_angel on Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 10:24:01 AM AEST
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gosh that is an amazing write! you say your colors are black and white eh? as are mine, as are mine. it takes time for your eyes to adjust sometimes... ull eventually see the color as clear as crystal. it may start dull but dont worry, it will brighten. youre not alone, ppl care.
luv n hugs,
jennie*

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