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[aid] => mick
[title] => My Colors
[time] => 2005-05-13 17:41:08
[hometext] => this is my first haiku poem i hope i got it right i think i did i raelly hope you like it! plz comment if u get a chance! thanks so much
[bodytext] => Black,Blue,Red
My colors shed as I go from hate to love
Remedy
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My Colors
Contributed by
sick_n_twisted
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Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 05:41:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Black,Blue,Red
My colors shed as I go from hate to love
Remedy
Copyright ©
sick_n_twisted
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2005-05-13 17:41:08]
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Re: My Colors
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 08:08:06 PM AEST
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I love the words and I hope you will try to rework it, but a haiku's structure is:
5 syllables (1st line)
7 syllables (2nd line)
5 syllables (3rd line)
Haikus are a lot of fun to do and in reality are about nature. Keep trying. You will get the knack of it quickly.
Peace,
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Re: My Colors
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by sick_n_twisted on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 08:56:54 PM AEST
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| thanks! lol i didnt even know what i was doing or anything i thought they were just 17 sylibols or whatever however u spell it lol i will try harder next time i really appreciate your comment thanks again! denise, |
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Re: My Colors
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by hardrocker15198916 on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 08:49:36 PM AEST
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yeah thats not a haiku
not even close to a haiku |
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Re: My Colors
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by angel_eyes70 on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 02:05:42 AM AEST
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Ha Ha, Well I Thought I Might As Well Comment On This One, Seeing Im Doing That With Every Other Poem But This Is Much Better Than However My First One Will Turn Out.Lol
*Hugs And Kisses*
Kimmy |
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