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[aid] => mick
[title] => Painted roses
[time] => 2005-05-09 12:25:50
[hometext] => This will be the last poem I post here for a while. I'll still be around, but not posting. Goodbye, my friends. Make what you will of this, I will not tell.
[bodytext] => She had tried painting the roses red,
Thinking it would help somehow.
[She had always thought,
White was too innocent anyway.]
And red was how she felt now,
How the blood was pumping in her chest,
And how it wanted to spill.
She could feel it.
It was angry.
She was angry
She had smiled,
When the thorns had pieced her skin,
From clutching the rose too hard.
And as the blood welled up,
She had tasted it
It tasted like betrayal
It was familiar,
Mixing well with the cloying smell
Of the paint.
She could feel her eyes sting,
From pain or fumes, she did not know,
But
It hurt anyway
And the roses,
Were dying,
But the roses,
Were beautiful.
And she was red...
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[score] => 55
[ratings] => 11
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
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Painted roses
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 12:25:50 PM in AEST
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She had tried painting the roses red,
Thinking it would help somehow.
[She had always thought,
White was too innocent anyway.]
And red was how she felt now,
How the blood was pumping in her chest,
And how it wanted to spill.
She could feel it.
It was angry.
She was angry
She had smiled,
When the thorns had pieced her skin,
From clutching the rose too hard.
And as the blood welled up,
She had tasted it
It tasted like betrayal
It was familiar,
Mixing well with the cloying smell
Of the paint.
She could feel her eyes sting,
From pain or fumes, she did not know,
But
It hurt anyway
And the roses,
Were dying,
But the roses,
Were beautiful.
And she was red...
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Re: Painted roses
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 12:30:16 PM AEST
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gosh philly. This was Filled with powerful emotion. Don't leave... Stick around. It'll be fun!
*hugs* J. |
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Re: Painted roses
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 12:31:14 PM AEST
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Truly poetic...Such emotion. I hope you're not leaving forumland too(??) *cries*
We'll miss you Phil.....Scorp. |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 12:47:54 PM AEST
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Oh please don't leave... so much emotion in that poetry...**sigh** We all have our own little world.. when we need to hide.. but, its too easy... stick around and share your wonderful writing with us plz.
~~~Michelle~~~ |
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Re: Painted roses
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by In_a_while on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 12:59:47 PM AEST
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| very nice poem and written with lots of imagery and emotion. Hope to read more in the future. dw |
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Re: Painted roses
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 01:09:07 PM AEST
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((((((((Phil))))))))))
I can relate to this blood soaked poem of pain. Your words always touch me and I know you'll always be around, because we here are your family and you can never get far away from us. Remember, we have a part of you inside our hearts always. We share your grief, and respect you! For whatever reason you are not going to post, I respect that... but a PM every now and then will do me wonders! :-) Love ya Phil!!!! Angel always...joni (((Phil))) |
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Re: Painted roses
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 02:49:09 PM AEST
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(fav lines)
"She had smiled,
When the thorns had pieced her skin,
From clutching the rose too hard.
And as the blood welled up,
She had tasted it
It tasted like betrayal"
wickedly powerful...I loved it..
gret read!
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Re: Painted roses
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 02:54:22 PM AEST
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I can somohow understand not writing poetry for now, but i am glad that your sticking around Phil. This place wont be the same without you so please do stay.
Amazing write as always Philly.
Hugs,
Jane xxx |
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Re: Painted roses
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by FleurdeSang on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 05:05:40 PM AEST
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**Jumbo hugs for Phil!**
My dear friend, I haven't known you for too long, but the time that we have spoken, and I've seen you grow with your poetry... I will never forget those moments. A heart-breaking write, dripping with ruthless agony, and morbid yet beautiful images... You write so well, and with such a powerful voice. We will miss you dearly, and your divine words. Glad to hear you are not leaving here forever!! A deliciously dark and painful write, a brief end to your legacy... May you express yourself again soon, and may happiness fill your life. You deserve everything good. All my love, my friend. Forever,
Your ever comforting and dear friend,
Stephy!! *PM away! Don't hesitate, hon. Je t'aime. Aurevoir for now. (huggs)* |
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Re: Painted roses
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by shelby on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 06:48:22 PM AEST
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heart breaking write I hope that you dont stay away to long if ever needed Im a pm away
hugssss
Michelle |
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Re: Painted roses
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 08:06:18 PM AEST
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UH in the words of the terminator, you'll be bock, besides who am i gonna have 2 argue with now, lol honsestly phill? i support what ever u decide 2 do, as the cheif said 2 max
take some time off grow a beard i'll be here 4u when u come back, and u better . . .
(((((((((((((((((((((((PMT))))))))))))))))))))))))
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Painted roses
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 12:44:05 PM AEST
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Philly,
This is powerful indeed!
I do understand not posting...just so you don't stop writing!!!!
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Re: Painted roses
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 02:04:41 AM AEST
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Symbolical, Obsure, Abstract and simply and most saddly Beautiful.
I hope you come back to us soon, Phil.
Your poetry and presence at YPDC is admired and loved by many.
-Romanticist ox. |
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Re: Painted roses
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 10:33:20 AM AEST
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A potent painful write, and along with the "anger" it feels sad. I am not sure I understand it all, but I am very moved by your words. I feel sad that you will not be posting; but I respect your decision. I will miss your poems, as I admire your talent and enjoy reading your poetry. I'm trying to learn to be a little more abstract in my writing as well. You will be missed, it's obvious you are very popular.
Peace
Will |
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Re: Painted roses
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 03:35:26 AM AEST
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dear phil, this is brilliant and clever, beautifully written, an awesome powerful poem, ...but i have decided to ignore your note cause i love ya, write no matter what and dont forget to come home,
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Painted roses
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th May 2005 @ 08:45:56 AM AEST
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| a very emotional poem,,please stick around , we've just met,,,I haven't got to know you yet,,,, |
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Re: Painted roses
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 06:02:50 PM AEST
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wow awsome philly girl.
you truely amaze me. |
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Re: Painted roses
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 07:13:51 PM AEST
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It's beautiful work, Phil. God bless you, and all of the rest of us as well. Take as long as you need, but don't put down the pen.
Andrew
(praying for all of us) |
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by heartless_soul on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 06:26:31 PM AEST
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| OMG. this was an amazing write, your choice of structure and words were impeccable, the feelings portrayed in this poem showed anger with out being angry themselves, brilliant. Sorry to here that you are leaving, I do hope that you accomplich what you set out to do and return to us fulfilled and ready to post more writings as good (or better *lol*) as this one. Be well |
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 20th May 2005 @ 01:54:24 PM AEST
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I have been here a few times now ... I can't help but think that the site will lose some of itself without your poetry. I hope the decision is reversible and that you once again grace us with your words and their presence. I will miss them Phil. Through them, I will miss a part of you, as well. As has been said before ... I will repeat, just don't stop writing.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Painted roses
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by Dorkfish on
Friday, 10th June 2005 @ 06:12:42 PM AEST
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| Very good! I enjoyed that! You have a way with words. |
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by liquidsunshine on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 05:42:04 PM AEST
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I've just gotten back to reading some poetry.
This is... amazing.
It's poignant and thought-provoking and --in a way, for some reason-- satisfying.
I love it. I love you, Philomena.
Love and peace,
Chels |
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Re: Painted roses
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by DreamPoetess on
Saturday, 5th November 2005 @ 10:03:42 PM AEST
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| sad poem |
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