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A Secret Love
Contributed by
brookers
on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 12:29:29 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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A little girl with no hope
Won't let her body float
Sitting at the bottom of life
She sets her mother free from strife
The cruel words her mother told her
I hate you, I wish your life was over.
Has set the stone in her daughters heart
Now from this world she does depart
No longer breathing lifes sweat air
No longer living in despair
As she takes one last look
She sees her mother all ashook
confused by what she sees
She tries to set her body free
but its too late her heart has stopped
Her mother screams as her body drops
To late for sorry this story ends.
Her mother hanging in the den.
Copyright ©
brookers
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2005-05-09 00:29:29]
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Re: A Secret Love
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 01:05:34 AM AEST
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| This is very sad...I hope things have gotten better for you...Scorp. |
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Re: A Secret Love
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by heartless_soul on
Monday, 9th May 2005 @ 02:57:32 AM AEST
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this was a very sad poem not alot of implayed emotions notthing exponded which was good for the poems structure. I am glad to here that you are doing well and hope that you dont feel this way again.
P.S. I dont know if its just the way I am reading it but the last half of the poem confused me, I am sorry if this offends you I didnt mean to but please do tell me what is happining there. Be well. |
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Re: A Secret Love
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by MorningDove on
Tuesday, 10th May 2005 @ 01:56:33 AM AEST
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This is emotionally powerful. The imagery is great, albeit extremely sad. I do hope this is never real in your life. Talk it, write it, just don't ever do it. Life does get brighter as you age and you become comfortable within your own being.
Dove |
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