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[title] => Stinger vs Stinger
[time] => 2005-05-02 21:32:13
[hometext] => This was an important turning point in my life I guess you could say.
[bodytext] => Ahem, an important piece
an in-depth release
The pain and humiliation has long since ceased
A crease in time
a miserable rhyme
I learnt so much from one who knew so little
a friendship (relationship?) that was short and fickle
Your scare tactics made you feel like a man
If only I knew then that your life was a sham
my lesson from you was but a grievous one
In my darkest of despairs I almost missed 21...
You callously laughed as you stole everything precious to me
You almost succeeded with my last breath---or didn't you see?
but the Eagle prevailed from somewhere deep within
I didn't see it then, but now I look back with a satisfied grin
A predictable outcome, or so I thought
but your character is weak, and mine...
IS NOT.
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Stinger vs Stinger
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 09:32:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Ahem, an important piece
an in-depth release
The pain and humiliation has long since ceased
A crease in time
a miserable rhyme
I learnt so much from one who knew so little
a friendship (relationship?) that was short and fickle
Your scare tactics made you feel like a man
If only I knew then that your life was a sham
my lesson from you was but a grievous one
In my darkest of despairs I almost missed 21...
You callously laughed as you stole everything precious to me
You almost succeeded with my last breath---or didn't you see?
but the Eagle prevailed from somewhere deep within
I didn't see it then, but now I look back with a satisfied grin
A predictable outcome, or so I thought
but your character is weak, and mine...
IS NOT.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2005-05-02 21:32:13]
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 11:22:50 PM AEST
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| very good! i liked it. |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 11:49:27 AM AEST
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Well written. Liked it very much.
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by stinger on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 03:39:00 PM AEST
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| wanted to read this poem, glad i did great write! my husband calls me stinger, never my real name, it comes from my throwing darts realy hard and fast, works for me! |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by fielding88 on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 06:45:23 PM AEST
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| Ha! Well done! I loved that ending. You have an impressive way with words, and I've been using the word impressive to describe all your writes so far (if memory serves). They truly are though. You always have something to say and a new conclusion has been made in each of them from where you began. This one stood out to me for some reason though, and I can't put my finger on it. It was just...great. |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 12:43:54 AM AEST
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A pretty strong write,
very effective ending.
You have a lot you want to release.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 02:43:59 AM AEST
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Fabulously defiant. The Scorpion finds her ( wings ? ) sting. Ambiguous enough that it gives little away but conveys a full weight of heavy emotion ... Loved this.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by sride686 on
Friday, 13th May 2005 @ 02:45:09 AM AEST
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This was a good write but I’m sorry to read of pain you once had but it is good to see you came out strong. When love hurts you never let them see you week be strong theirs always another that will treat you right. This write had a different style and was a enjoyable read. Take care my friend and thank you for sharing this wonderful work of emotions. Hope things are looking better for you now and keep up the good fight. I can sense you are a very strong person and he doesn’t realize how much he lost. Bye for now….Steve |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st June 2005 @ 10:06:58 AM AEST
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| Oh yeah!!! This poem really does have a sting. Very well done, Scorp. |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 11th July 2005 @ 11:46:33 PM AEST
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| i loved the ending. this was (bee)autiful. im still rereading the ending, since i like it so much. i loved the beginning tone as well. ::goes off in mind rhyming stinger:: |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by Alibi on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 12:24:28 AM AEST
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| I thought I would read one poem for every page in your account. I am becoming increasingly fascinated by your life and work. I sense something very serious in this particular poem. Something life altering perhaps. The title is thought provoking, and the ending is exceptional! I hope you truly believe those words my dear. I feel it to be quite true with you. Many happy blessings your way. As for what you asked me before, I am intrigued by poetry, but have yet to give it a try. Poets like yourself inspire me, and I hope to give it a go soon. Blessings! |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by justice on
Wednesday, 12th October 2005 @ 05:48:39 PM AEST
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| great poem your a great writer your ryming techenic was very effective |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th July 2006 @ 05:38:35 PM AEST
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(if you can travel back...so too, can I! lol)
wow .. you little scorpio you!! God, as a fellow scorpio, I must say
I absolutely ADORE that last line to pieces!!
I relate and understand this piece, scopry. [you know]
Embodied with emotions that are far better out than in, hun.
Excellent post! [and I'm sure he deserved it!]
~Breezy |
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Re: Stinger vs Stinger
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th October 2014 @ 01:42:38 AM AEST
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I absolutely love the way this starts out. Like, ahem, let me clear my throat before I rake you over the coals!
Yep, you definitely don't have a weak character, you character. ;-) |
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