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[aid] => mick
[title] => Charcoal skies
[time] => 2005-04-30 21:35:45
[hometext] => Two days ago i made an attempt on my life, and i wrote this to vent out my emotions. comments will be greatly appreciated, enjoy.
[bodytext] => So many ways to live like a prisoner
As I hide myself from eternal shame
The rain melts from the charcoal skies
And I shiver at the thought that the wind has learnt my name
At this tantalizing theory, my heart beings to flutter
I realize there is no-where else that I can place the blame
(As I swallow 30 cages of nothingness
I know that I will never be the same)
My soul grows weak and weary
As I stumble down the hall
I drop to my knees while my head
Swims with anticipation of the fall
You are my brethren, can’t you see?
I just wanted us to have it all
(The blue and red escort me
To the place where I must fall)
Tumbling and turning
I lie in a sea of white
Memory is hazy
I’ve brought upon this plight
My shadow beings to quiver
I havn’t given up the fight
(My eyes flicker open as I decide
I won’t leave you forsaken tonight)
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[ratings] => 2
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Charcoal skies
Contributed by
bohemian_with_a_pen
on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 09:35:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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So many ways to live like a prisoner
As I hide myself from eternal shame
The rain melts from the charcoal skies
And I shiver at the thought that the wind has learnt my name
At this tantalizing theory, my heart beings to flutter
I realize there is no-where else that I can place the blame
(As I swallow 30 cages of nothingness
I know that I will never be the same)
My soul grows weak and weary
As I stumble down the hall
I drop to my knees while my head
Swims with anticipation of the fall
You are my brethren, can’t you see?
I just wanted us to have it all
(The blue and red escort me
To the place where I must fall)
Tumbling and turning
I lie in a sea of white
Memory is hazy
I’ve brought upon this plight
My shadow beings to quiver
I havn’t given up the fight
(My eyes flicker open as I decide
I won’t leave you forsaken tonight)
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2005-04-30 21:35:45]
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by Anne-ish on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 09:43:46 PM AEST
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| Don't try to hurt yourself again. God loves you so fricken much. You're a beautiful writer, too. |
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 11:33:44 PM AEST
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well, first off im happy you are still with us, your an amazing poet and would be greatly missed! the world needs your voice, ...your poem is excellent, showing honestly and depth... hang in there, if you need me im here:) big hugs n' love always, nessa
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 03:22:12 AM AEST
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Aww this is so sad, emotional and heart wrenching. Dear friend do not attempt to rid yourself from this world for u shall break many hearts including mine. Alot of people care for u and are here for u whenever u need them. Hang tuff and these awful feelings shall very soon pass. You're a very talented writer with such a unique style of writing. Keep on venting ur emotions through ur writing. For u do this so well.
Please never try to take ur life again for u r a very valued and treasured person.
Heartfelt hugs for u dear friend,
~sue~
PS Need to talk or vent out Pm me ok. |
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 04:55:21 AM AEST
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| 'I shiver at the the thought that the wind has learnt my name'....this is an unforgettable line and the poem is so well written.I hope you find some peace of mind |
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by crazygirl on
Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 05:57:33 PM AEST
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| its beautifull. Im glad you got a second chance.:) |
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by Scarlett on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 03:14:30 AM AEST
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"The rain melts from the charcoal skies"
amazing images and beautiful words. you are very talented. |
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by weepingprophet on
Friday, 7th October 2005 @ 04:04:34 PM AEST
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I am without the capacity to describe how deep and how severely you have impacted me. Your words may be a story of your experience but they have captivated a disease in me and sparked it into recognition, you have an amazing talent. Use it and never forsake yourself, we here, outside can only hold you so long, forsaking anyone but yourself is forgiveable. Never surrender to your dark counter-parts. Learn and strive to use them soley for yourself, at times it is necessary to end life only to begin it anew. Take your attempt failed as a blessing, an awakening and cherish what you know deep down but will not let be seen in the light of day, you are worth something, more profound than these words more profound than this world.
~purpose, it is always hiding from me, peeking around the corners of your eyes and enticing what has held me here. you~weepingprophet |
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Re: Charcoal skies
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by PlainFreshRain on
Friday, 20th June 2008 @ 11:00:00 PM AEST
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You wrote this over 3 years ago
Lovely way of composing words, I compliment you
Your life must be different now, all our lives are whether we notice or not, time is mysterious and relentless is it not.
Therefore I hope in the power of healing and wish you all the best
Conal
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