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[aid] => mick
[title] => Barely Waking
[time] => 2005-04-28 01:39:57
[hometext] => *** Consider what we couldn't have known yesterday... and... think of how overwhelming it is when a new awareness falls upon you. Now.... imagine what tomorrow holds. This time, then... is like the moment that the sun first shows itself at dawn ***
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In that moment
When awareness collided
With recollection -
The thunderous sound of dust
Burst into and through
The overwhelming, silent pause
That followed
And I swear I heard
A song dancing across
The breathless sky
My mind raced
Like wild lightning through
A forgotten time
When the stars were all blind
Locked as they were
Behind those reticent doors
Of nighttime
And I sensed awakening
As a dream was freed
In infinite sighs
I could believe
In the near impossibilities
Tangled up in truth
Escaping the pain of gravity
On invisible wings
Sprouted from the everything
Of before
And I knew then why
The world just seems to
Stop sometimes…
At sunrise
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 303
[topic] => 19
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 49
[ratings] => 10
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => InspirationalPoems
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Barely Waking
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 01:39:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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In that moment
When awareness collided
With recollection -
The thunderous sound of dust
Burst into and through
The overwhelming, silent pause
That followed
And I swear I heard
A song dancing across
The breathless sky
My mind raced
Like wild lightning through
A forgotten time
When the stars were all blind
Locked as they were
Behind those reticent doors
Of nighttime
And I sensed awakening
As a dream was freed
In infinite sighs
I could believe
In the near impossibilities
Tangled up in truth
Escaping the pain of gravity
On invisible wings
Sprouted from the everything
Of before
And I knew then why
The world just seems to
Stop sometimes…
At sunrise
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2005-04-28 01:39:57]
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Re: Barely Waking
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 06:18:11 AM AEST
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Snemmy, this was just breathtakingly beautiful. I love the simplicity of this poem.
Wouldn't life be grand if things where like this?
Anyways before I rant again id like to say that this poem just took my breath away.
Jane~
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Re: Barely Waking
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 06:18:15 AM AEST
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Snemmy, this was just breathtakingly beautiful. I love the simplicity of this poem.
Wouldn't life be grand if things where like this?
Anyways before I rant again id like to say that this poem just took my breath away.
Jane~
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Re: Barely Waking
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by venkat on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 06:34:39 AM AEST
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| This is the best poem I read on today.. the expression of emotional feelings is really great...I can give it more than 5 stars:-) venkat |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by mina-1 on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 08:14:55 AM AEST
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wow A truly heavenly breath taking piece of poetry so beautifully written. Simply divine.
Hugs,
~sue~ |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by FleurdeSang on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 10:31:35 AM AEST
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Ma douce, cheri Snemmy.... A masterpiece of sheer perfection such as this deserves a thousand comments, a thousand stars, and millions of gold medals... Beautiful, inspirational, exquisite till the very last word... Your words convey a sense of freedom, a sense of knowing what might come, be it bad or good, and yet, there is hope... Your talent shines brilliantly through, cheri. Merci beaucoup for sharing this uplifting melody... *Hugs for Snemmy* I couldn't have written anything like this. You are truly a queen of poetry. All my love. Forever,
Your dear friend/fan,
Stephy. *still breathless* |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 11:25:36 AM AEST
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Mind if I just sit here and read ? And re-read ?
In the silence that surrounds me ... my words seem suddenly ...
Unnecessary.
Beautiful Snemmy
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 02:49:06 PM AEST
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Before I talk about the poem... Snemmy, that is without doubt the best author's note I have ever seen. I could get all inspired just on it alone.
Come to think of it, you might consider making it part of the poem, perhaps an opener in italics?
I know this feeling, and have seldom heard it really captured, as you have done. I love the way you have tied sunrise in with growth, epiphany, for it is highly symbolic. A beautiful job, my friend. I shall definitely return to this piece.
Andrew |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 08:33:57 PM AEST
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A beautiful poetic excursion into the spirt of
the imagination via the heart and soul . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 10:02:01 AM AEST
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I most probably said this 100 times in the past. But great poetry requires lateral thought. That ability to think outside of oneself, you have this in abundance, another
job well done.
Johnny. |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by reflections on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 06:34:09 PM AEST
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At last, that magic moment that happens when the new day is hailed, is presented for our scrutiny. All the memories of all the mornings when time stands still for that solitary moment (allowing us to disengage from the mystical moods of sleep and re-enter the realness of the world around us) is laid before the reader. You have given life, and meaning, to that moment . . . and have accomplished your goal with such effortlessness (the mark of a talented poetess among a bevy of rhymers such as I). My congratulations on your superbly written masterpiece.
John
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Re: Barely Waking
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by freckle on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 09:43:38 PM AEST
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Snemmy...I just love your writing style. You are truly a talented woman. If you ever compose a book of your prose...I will buy several. A fabulous write!
Carol |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 6th May 2005 @ 01:26:30 PM AEST
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*takes a deep breath*
I read this, then I had to read it again, without any sound in the background, and then I had to read it aloud..and wow, Snemmy...
I have never seen anything like this before, and I too believe it is your best.
I can't even think of a favourite part, I love it all.
I will come back to this often, I know I will. I have to.
Thankyou for sharing.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: Barely Waking
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 04:41:34 AM AEST
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Awesomely beautiful!
It's really hard to add to what the others have already said but your poetry really blows me away.
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