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[aid] => mick
[title] => Ode to Memory
[time] => 2005-04-23 19:25:57
[hometext] => -feel free to comment on my work and I'll comment on yours in return...-
[bodytext] => Dark romance touches my eyes
An autumn bird has fallen from the skies
Paralysed beauty fills the grass
Shaped like a mound of shattered glass
The birds burgundy breast is fatally displayed
I wish I could swoop down and steal the decay
To put it in me instead would mean the bird would be okay
But life is a ladder you climb... then it’s taken away
I buried the autumn bird by a tree
They say; ‘being at one with the soil will set you free’
Life will come and go regardless of strokes
I exhale for remembrance and all that it provokes
I walked away and said my goodbyes
Death gives me answers to help me survive
Days fold like a candle, burning in an hourglass
Slipping like wax, memories are coiled into seconds that last
A memory can come and go,
When all is dark, a memory still glows
It’s an ever versant tree with branches previously sold,
In a memory is where I unfold
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[informant] => overstated
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[alanguage] => english
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[score] => 32
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
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[topicname] => Nostalgic
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Ode to Memory
Contributed by
overstated
on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 07:25:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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Dark romance touches my eyes
An autumn bird has fallen from the skies
Paralysed beauty fills the grass
Shaped like a mound of shattered glass
The birds burgundy breast is fatally displayed
I wish I could swoop down and steal the decay
To put it in me instead would mean the bird would be okay
But life is a ladder you climb... then it’s taken away
I buried the autumn bird by a tree
They say; ‘being at one with the soil will set you free’
Life will come and go regardless of strokes
I exhale for remembrance and all that it provokes
I walked away and said my goodbyes
Death gives me answers to help me survive
Days fold like a candle, burning in an hourglass
Slipping like wax, memories are coiled into seconds that last
A memory can come and go,
When all is dark, a memory still glows
It’s an ever versant tree with branches previously sold,
In a memory is where I unfold
Copyright ©
overstated
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2005-04-23 19:25:57]
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 07:57:48 PM AEST
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I wasn't half way through this and it brought
tears 2 my eyes and a swell 2 my heart, first
i've read of your work, but it won't be the last,
u have a beautiful style, lovely peice of poetry.
Dorian Chambers
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:06:43 PM AEST
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I love this.
The images in it are lovely, if sad.
And I love the thought behind it, too.
That second stanza is really good.
*hugs tons* Phil xxx
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by Daniels_Princess on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:06:51 PM AEST
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| This is possibly one of the most beautiful pieces I have ever read..I loved it..your words clearly eched an image in my mind..and it was simply amazing..I will be looking forward to more by you. |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by Jackee_line on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:30:54 PM AEST
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| Excellent descriptive write,well done |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 03:23:08 AM AEST
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wow this is absolutely stunning. Sad, but elucidated piece of poetry twisted with pain.
A sheer masterpiece. Truly divine. Well done.
Hugs,
~sue~ |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by lonelywolf04 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 05:35:17 AM AEST
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| must say very good the 3 or 4 of ur poems i read seem to have a song feel to them but again very good |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by Thin_skin on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:06:21 AM AEST
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This is really good, I like your style.
Very nice use of words and flow..
4 out of 5 x X x |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by pixie on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:48:41 AM AEST
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a great write. I had to read this a few times, I loved this. great writing,
pix xx |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 02:34:52 AM AEST
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absolutely exquisite.. hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 08:57:52 PM AEST
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A sad life lesson indeed.
And oh so well written and expressed!
Bravo! |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by waos on
Thursday, 19th May 2005 @ 12:16:50 AM AEST
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Once again, gorgeous. It's been a while since I was commenting on poems
on here, and boy am I glad I read this one. It made me sad when you
talked about the bird... there was one hurt on our front lawn the other day,
but we put it away safe, and it was better after the next day.
You put such beauty into the idea of a memory. I love how you mix nature
into ideas... it makes it so much more real to me. Amazing job!
~Kara |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by Dorkfish on
Monday, 13th June 2005 @ 11:55:44 AM AEST
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| I really liked that one! :o) |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 27th July 2005 @ 07:48:15 AM AEST
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Beautiful style and excellent wording..
I am deloighted to read your poems..:-) venkat |
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Re: Ode to Memory
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by Channing on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 01:58:43 AM AEST
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| This is an awesome poem, its very beautifully written and has lots of imagery in it, excellent write! |
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