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SUICIDE 1
Contributed by
emystar
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Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 09:51:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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SultryRose's Signatures
Oh sweet, precious understand
why your lonely soul wanted to die.
He did it to me, hon, that lieing
cheating snake called suicide!
He romances you in his lieing
seducing tounge then drops
you like a hot cake when you
speak of luv, Jesus kind.
Let me tell you, my dearest angel,
his heart is black as a starless night.
Consumes them with anger to
kill souls by their own hands.
That demon respects no one see?
Well last week it silently attacked me.
All night long fought it untill
that demon gave up. It's gone!
Awe he couldn't get me that way
so he planned his next attack, that
evil snake.
He knew her heart condition
so his next attack came with
stress. See he knew sooner
or later that her heart would
crumble if he killed her heart.
End part 1
Copyright ©
emystar
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2005-04-18 21:51:51]
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 10:14:30 PM AEST
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Deeply touches the heart so sad a lament 2
read, yet in time all does heal . . .
Dorian Chambers
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by reflections on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 10:54:56 PM AEST
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You got me hooked on an interesting, well composed poem. I see the “End of Part 1” and I have to believe there’s more to come. I’ll have to come back and see where this is going. The music certainly fits the plot and subject. Good show.
(Cheers
John
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by greeneyes on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:07:47 PM AEST
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Wow, this had me on edge from beginning to end.
Excellent writting.
Nancy |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:09:01 PM AEST
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Good write, Grrlfriend...good thing she is strong!!
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by mina-1 on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:24:42 PM AEST
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wow Emy this is a thought provoking write. I can see the pain and anguish through the lines. Hang tuff friend. You certainly got me hooked on ur pain and I can't wait to read the next part of it. Well done.
Hugs,
Sue |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 12:59:21 AM AEST
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The Demons lurk forever
good battle
well done
The Wind |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by Shishke_Bob on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 01:53:34 AM AEST
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| this is a very interestinly good one, you speak of this with such knowing that it almost tells as if you were doing in, I am also woundering about the other person you are talking to and woundering what will happen to them, well I am off to read the next on see yah. God bless. |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 02:37:50 AM AEST
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| Marvellous conclusion..because you are strong and spiritual..the demon could not get you..beautiful write..hugs n love :-) venkat |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by sweetangeluk on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 03:18:52 PM AEST
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Keep this inner strength Emy. Your faith will keep you from harm.
A fantastic write troubled with the demons that enter ones trouble mind.
(((HUGS)))))
Love Angelxxx |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by Spazzo on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 05:25:10 AM AEST
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You are really strong. Thank you for posting this one too.
Scott |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 08:16:30 PM AEST
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A fascinating write Emystar. Eminently relevant topic, but I have to come back and read the other parts.
You broached a subject that ikeeps readers on edge
Love and peace
Elizabeth |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 03:01:29 AM AEST
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powerful write emy nice one.
Johnny. |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by Nazmythian on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 04:50:56 AM AEST
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I like to see that demon lose ... I wish it would happen more often ... hopefully with this write as an example ... he will.
Way to write Emy
Nazzy ~
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:42:11 PM AEST
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So true little Emy...........he doesn't care what it is that he uses to get us.........just so it works, and if he can't get us one way, he will keep trying until he finds the right button to bring us down.
He's a very cruel and unfeeling power Spiritual Creature. And he is Very Beautiful, not Ugly like we depict him........Because of his beauty..........many follow him in this world.
I loved the whole series Emy............alot of thought went into them......excellent writes, and so true!!!!!
Love you
momconsue |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 01:53:26 AM AEST
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I liked how this was written out especially the
last stanza. It is late here and I am tired so if
you can't make sense of this comment then
that is why. Anyway I raelly liked this poem
especially when you said suicide "romances
you in his lieing" that was just great I thought.
Personally, I thought the music was
distracting, but that could be just me. I'll read
the other 3 later.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by Archie on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 04:29:49 PM AEST
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| Great poem. I look forward to reading to series. |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by irememberyou on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 10:03:37 PM AEST
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| You sure can write poems! Your truly good at it. xo crystal |
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Re: SUICIDE 1
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by xXcrossedXx on
Saturday, 11th June 2005 @ 09:09:24 AM AEST
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Excellent write you got me hooked as well, very powerful. Great job!
--amanda-- |
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