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He was a lot, like James Dean
We’ve had our ups, and our downs
I cried so much, I thought I’d drown
We faced tough times, when he left for Iraq
Many a night, I wished him back
He’s now home, but only for ten days
And yet his body, isn’t where mine lays
At least he’s here, and in one piece
Knowing that, my mind’s at ease
Two more years, that’s all that remains
He’ll be free, and no longer detained
But he’s a marine, and I’m insecure
Cuz of all the women, he probably lures
He says he doesn’t, but what do I know?
Maybe what he does, is put on a show
But I’m not stressing, because we’re not together
Maybe in a few years, we’ll be like birds on a feather
He’s my longest, he’s my first
He’s the only one, that makes my heart thirst
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My 'First'

Contributed by o7neves on Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 12:43:23 AM in AEST
Topic: LovePoetry

I met him when, I was fifteen
He was a lot, like James Dean
We’ve had our ups, and our downs
I cried so much, I thought I’d drown
We faced tough times, when he left for Iraq
Many a night, I wished him back
He’s now home, but only for ten days
And yet his body, isn’t where mine lays
At least he’s here, and in one piece
Knowing that, my mind’s at ease
Two more years, that’s all that remains
He’ll be free, and no longer detained
But he’s a marine, and I’m insecure
Cuz of all the women, he probably lures
He says he doesn’t, but what do I know?
Maybe what he does, is put on a show
But I’m not stressing, because we’re not together
Maybe in a few years, we’ll be like birds on a feather
He’s my longest, he’s my first
He’s the only one, that makes my heart thirst

Copyright Â© o7neves ... [ 2005-04-08 00:43:23]
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Re: My 'First' (User Rating: 1 )
by Sir_Odd87 on Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 10:15:44 AM AEST
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Wow, this sounds a lot like a friend of mine... Good write... If you're willing to accept them, I do have a couple constructive criticism points... I won't post them here, but if you want them, message me...

Re: My 'First' (User Rating: 1 )
by THUGGIN4REAL on Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 01:33:15 PM AEST
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dont have doubts,follow your heart,good write

Re: My 'First' (User Rating: 1 )
by mina-1 on Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 08:28:07 PM AEST
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This is a great and very well expressed poem that touches the heart. I loved the flow and the way u presented it. A sad, but otherwise enjoyable write. Well done and wish u well with ur marine.
Hugs,
Sue

Re: My 'First' (User Rating: 1 )
by usmc2534 on Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 10:29:57 PM AEST
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I know what you mean.........Service in the Marines can be a real heartbreaker for those who love you..............Like you said,"Maybe in a few years"................

Re: My 'First' (User Rating: 1 )
by Spazzo on Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 10:46:29 PM AEST
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Wow. Really beautiful. And really touching.

Scott

Re: My 'First' (User Rating: 1 )
by animusutputo on Friday, 3rd June 2005 @ 04:59:23 PM AEST
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Well as they always say you cant ever have a "first" again so to speak... Dont we all remember the first of everything... first one to ever break your heart.. to first one to ever have your heart in all its glory... the first one to ever leave you... we would all hope that by the "second" we would know "better"

Re: My 'First' (User Rating: 1 )
by CurtisC on Wednesday, 29th June 2005 @ 04:16:45 PM AEST
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there will always be that "connection" between you two and it will never fade away...this is a wonderful poem about your first love, the first one is always the hardest one to lose.....everything's gonna workout for you girl, i know it!

Curtis

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