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[sid] => 88882
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => On the floor
[time] => 2005-03-26 22:05:27
[hometext] =>
[bodytext] => I lie on the floor
As I watch myself Bleed
As the pain grows stronger
As it begins to Exceed
With a broken Razor
By my side
I'm ready to confess
All of my lies
So listen closely
You will see
All the jokes and ridicule that revolve around me
Make me think I was never meant to be
So I'm doing you a favor
By ending it now
Theres no need to ask how
Thank the noose around my neck
The trailor for being an easy fall
I didnt want to do it
Until it became so clear
I dont belong here
So I will finally say my good byes
After that 6 ft under my body will lie
[comments] => 11
[counter] => 296
[topic] => 36
[informant] => Abloodytear
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 20
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
)
On the floor
Contributed by
Abloodytear
on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 10:05:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I lie on the floor
As I watch myself Bleed
As the pain grows stronger
As it begins to Exceed
With a broken Razor
By my side
I'm ready to confess
All of my lies
So listen closely
You will see
All the jokes and ridicule that revolve around me
Make me think I was never meant to be
So I'm doing you a favor
By ending it now
Theres no need to ask how
Thank the noose around my neck
The trailor for being an easy fall
I didnt want to do it
Until it became so clear
I dont belong here
So I will finally say my good byes
After that 6 ft under my body will lie
Copyright ©
Abloodytear
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2005-03-26 22:05:27]
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Re: On the floor
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by DragonLuvSong on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 12:06:03 AM AEST
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| i like this, just if you haven't read it out loud, do that. becuase i think some things could balance better and you hear it more clearly when you read your own writing and hear it. |
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Re: On the floor
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by emystar on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 08:21:50 AM AEST
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iT'S WRITTEN WELL SO i GIVE U FIVE BUT i PRAY TO GOD THIS IS ONLY WRITING.
I can't honestly say I don't like the content tho.
hang tuff 'cause it's hard living on this planet for all.
luv, huggs, prayers,
emy |
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Re: On the floor
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Tuesday, 24th May 2005 @ 09:03:08 AM AEST
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I think that this is well written and i can relate. Hang in there though. It's hard to feel rejected and get picked on by all but as long as you have something to hold on to no matter how big or how small then try to make it, only if you are that positive about ending your life then take it but then again what would you gain? what would it cause? I ask myself those questions every morning, night and day. I liked this poem alot. great job. remember everyone here is always here for you and they are all very supportive.
*hugs*
christina |
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Re: On the floor
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by mindset on
Thursday, 28th July 2005 @ 03:07:47 PM AEST
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| :) |
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Re: On the floor
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 05:48:49 PM AEST
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| i just hope this is only writing. |
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Re: On the floor
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by Minus_Blindfold on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 07:37:40 PM AEST
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| tres good! |
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Re: On the floor
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by Kazzy1231 on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 12:04:16 PM AEST
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| Good work,I feel the same,Please check out some of my poems! |
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Re: On the floor
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by zealousnatalie on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 12:19:34 PM AEST
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The mood of your writing is very much like my own..It's kind of strange, because I tend to write with negativity, and it is that emotion that sparks a plethora of other feelings, and that is where depth, originality, and truth comes from....Keep it up!
ZN |
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Re: On the floor
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by tearstained_soul on
Saturday, 11th November 2006 @ 11:11:05 PM AEST
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wow!
fav. line- "im ready to confess all of my lies, so listen closely. you will see all the jokes that revolve around me."
good job. keep it up! xoxo ~ brittney~ |
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Re: On the floor
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by Michaela on
Tuesday, 28th July 2009 @ 05:14:05 AM AEST
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Brilliantly crafted poem!!! Keep it up!
_michaela_ |
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Re: On the floor
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by iris1579 on
Wednesday, 14th December 2011 @ 09:29:54 AM AEST
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| You are amazing. I know how you feel... sadly. |
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