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The truth comes hurtling towards me at a snail’s pace
The truth, wrapped up in my own distorted face
And I threw it all away, so long ago
Threw everything away that meant so much

The pain in my soul messed up my mind
So I lost everything, nothing left inside to find
And I poured out all these tears
And choked upon my bleeding heart

Nothing can replace the emptiness I feel
You can’t stitch me back together and make me heal
It’s so real, so true, but nobody believes these lies
And the nonexistence swallows me whole
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Undeserving

Contributed by afraid_of_fear on Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 06:07:17 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

The truth comes hurtling towards me at a snail’s pace
The truth, wrapped up in my own distorted face
And I threw it all away, so long ago
Threw everything away that meant so much

The pain in my soul messed up my mind
So I lost everything, nothing left inside to find
And I poured out all these tears
And choked upon my bleeding heart

Nothing can replace the emptiness I feel
You can’t stitch me back together and make me heal
It’s so real, so true, but nobody believes these lies
And the nonexistence swallows me whole

Copyright Â© afraid_of_fear ... [ 2005-03-20 18:07:17]
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Re: Undeserving (User Rating: 1 )
by sick_n_twisted on Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 07:00:58 PM AEST
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i like this poem this is how i used to feel all the time im sorry if u really do feel like that and well writen thanks for reading what i have to say ,later'

Denise

Re: Undeserving (User Rating: 1 )
by Overstated on Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 07:07:48 AM AEST
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when reading this i felt it was a really honest piece of writing and that appealed to me - i really enjoyed the read

Re: Undeserving (User Rating: 1 )
by bobotheclown on Thursday, 14th April 2005 @ 03:33:52 PM AEST
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While this may be short it packed a punch
more powerful than a poem twice its size.
Wow this was awesome and with lines like,
"And I poured out all these tears
And choked upon my bleeding heart"
how can I not like it? Yes this was great stuff.

Bobo (Joel)

Re: Undeserving (User Rating: 1 )
by WorthlesSanity666 on Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 02:15:29 PM AEST
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Great job. You created some very pwerful images. My favorite lines were:
"And choked upon my bleeding heart."
"And the nonexistance swallows me."
Very strong write. I really like it.

~*Naomi of Night*~

Re: Undeserving (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 03:14:35 PM AEST
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deep, intense, heartfelt, beautifully written as always charlotte, hugs n' love nessa

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Re: Undeserving (User Rating: 1 )
by heartless_soul on Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 03:13:43 PM AEST
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this was truly full of meening and emotion, it was well writen and had great imager. I will pray that you will feel better and I hope that you do. Be well.

Re: Undeserving (User Rating: 1 )
by ruby_star_angel on Thursday, 2nd June 2005 @ 06:16:24 PM AEST
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Oh hun, this poem has so much emotion and I understand completely how it feels. I'm here for you, and many other of your friends. We'll help you if when you need it, okay? *hugs* Take care, hun. Hope you can look up in the future.

xoxox Mandy

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