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[sid] => 87844
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Say Goodbye
[time] => 2005-03-18 00:31:57
[hometext] => this is about saying goodbye to someone I love
[bodytext] => That look in your eye
no one can deny
the look that said " I love you"
but you still said Good bye
looked in my face
soaked up the pain
of losing what you had
but you still walked away
Don't look back
I'm part of your past
you drank all of me far from your brain
only memories of the arguments you choose
to let remian
On me you placed the blame
so it was easier to say
You had no reasons only what
you twisted up of us
You shut the door
as you turned far from me
as I crumbled to the floor
Now you don't care
you act as if I was never there
Searching for yourself
day by day
Your forgetting all of me as I slowly
fade far away
JENNI
[comments] => 18
[counter] => 731
[topic] => 52
[informant] => PhantomVampyress
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 34
[ratings] => 7
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => goodbyepoetry
)
Say Goodbye
Contributed by
PhantomVampyress
on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 12:31:57 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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That look in your eye
no one can deny
the look that said " I love you"
but you still said Good bye
looked in my face
soaked up the pain
of losing what you had
but you still walked away
Don't look back
I'm part of your past
you drank all of me far from your brain
only memories of the arguments you choose
to let remian
On me you placed the blame
so it was easier to say
You had no reasons only what
you twisted up of us
You shut the door
as you turned far from me
as I crumbled to the floor
Now you don't care
you act as if I was never there
Searching for yourself
day by day
Your forgetting all of me as I slowly
fade far away
JENNI
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2005-03-18 00:31:57]
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 12:39:31 AM AEST
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i like this and can relate.
u potray ur feelings of pain and betrayal well.
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by ForeverAlone on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 12:39:51 AM AEST
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Wow...You can reallt write...I feel for you on this one, I would have to sya if he wanted to place blame he was not worth being with...Great write though...And remember its not what he remembers of you, Its what you remember of him, that is what TRULY matters.
Clark |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by emystar on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 12:45:37 AM AEST
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Sad but great writting.
As long as I live I'll never understand why men do this.
keep writing girl.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by electrique_poet on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 12:49:21 AM AEST
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honestly sorrowful, simplely laced in complex emotions, this is a great write with a strong emotional force behind it
may you never fade far away
... in words electrique |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by ruthie1983 on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 12:58:34 AM AEST
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| i totally agree wit everybody comments, nice writting again. |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 01:10:59 AM AEST
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| I can definately relate to this piece sooo much! Amazingly written. You have a great way with words. Nice work. |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by Jenn2004 on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 02:11:55 AM AEST
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| Great write, i can def relate to that. |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by blowfish_jane on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 04:36:00 AM AEST
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Jenni this was such a sad write, i could totally relate to this since we just broke up with our exes on the same month.
This brings so much happy and sad memories. Thanks for sharing.
Jane |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by inoc on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 05:46:28 AM AEST
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This write leaves my heart heavy for you
All the best Jenni...
You wrote this so well
Specially liked the 3rd line...and the rest!!!
Love the write Jenni
You write so beaut!
But my heart feels heavy for you!
All the best and take care!
Inoc!!~
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by pixie on
Friday, 18th March 2005 @ 01:23:42 PM AEST
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powerful and deep, so many emotions in this write Jenni. *hugs*
pix xx |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by emystar on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 05:44:16 AM AEST
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Hey girl,
Was jus over here enjoying your writng again and since I first commented I jus wanted to say I rethunk my comment and now I understand why they do 'cause I remember being on the other side of this story years ago and I could name many reasons why but when I looked in the mirror I can see my ownself.
A great write as there's healing in this mirror u refleck.
luv ya,
emy
Very powerfull write. |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by BuTTerFly_LoVe on
Saturday, 19th March 2005 @ 08:54:36 AM AEST
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WOW whoooaaaa yahoooooooooo this was a great write.... IF there was 10 stars i'll give 10 stars for this write..
SAD but great the words the format everything
great job
KeEp up the great work
10 * * * * * * * * * * |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 03:10:37 PM AEST
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Your heartwrenching desrcription does your pain justice... a vivid picture came to life as I read this one... just a tough goodbye... The poem is sad, but... there's something in the tone that says, "I know you've chosen things to be this way and it hurts me but I understand somehow even though I disagree."
Maybe I'm reading too far into it, but that's what I got out of it... so... you've done a good job making your readers think.
Lots of love and peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by tx_graffiti_gal on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 04:20:59 PM AEST
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| awe.. to love and not be loved back. Taking in so much love and promise to be broken and let go never to remembered .. it hurts. |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th September 2005 @ 09:24:58 PM AEST
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| That was sad Jenni. I felt the emotion. Great writing. Thank you. Tim |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by Maciej on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 12:54:44 AM AEST
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| wow thats simply amazing the poem depicts all of the angst i felt at the end of my last relationship wow im giong to read it over and over |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by Jen54 on
Sunday, 2nd April 2006 @ 03:03:45 PM AEST
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Wow that was awsome. I love it.
-Jen |
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Re: Say Goodbye
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by Queentzie on
Tuesday, 29th August 2006 @ 03:33:47 PM AEST
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| B-E-A-U-Tiful! |
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