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Wishing You Were Still Here
Contributed by
pixie
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Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 03:11:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I sit alone wishing you were still here,
Feel too sad to even shed a tear,
The world seems discoloured & dull,
Inside my heart is a lonely pull.
I wish I’d have asked you to stay,
But instead I let you walk away,
I waved goodbye from the door,
As you left it hurt through to my core.
I rang so I could hear your loving tone,
So I wouldn’t feel so sad & alone,
But here I am & there you go,
Each time you leave I suffer such a blow.
I will my phone to start to ring,
Into my heart your love to sing,
I wish that you were right by my side,
I told you I was fine, but my love I lied.
I try to make myself alright,
But my insecurities didn’t die in the night,
Instead they whisper words of loneliness,
I am lonely without you I must confess.
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Re: Wishing You Were Still Here
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by Daniels_Princess on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 03:24:43 PM AEST
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| I love the last stanza on this poem, its something I can really relate to.."I try to make myself alright" Loving someone and then having them walk away is really hard..but you have to try your best to find the good in things and its not easy..Ive been there many times..keep your chin up and Im here if you need to talk..I'm going through the hurt right now, actually..great write |
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Re: Wishing You Were Still Here
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 03:46:50 PM AEST
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| i've so been at a point like this. you really captured it well. the most sincere part of the poem, to me at least, is the last stanza. there's a point in the poem where the main character lies, but by the end confesses. i really liked that part, this was so good. |
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Re: Wishing You Were Still Here
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 03:57:31 PM AEST
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| awwww sad and sweet, somehow the format seems slightly diffrent for you, sort of a softer you...very nice! |
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Re: Wishing You Were Still Here
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 07:27:39 PM AEST
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| that was a good poem. i feel the same way sometimes. |
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Re: Wishing You Were Still Here
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by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 15th March 2005 @ 09:16:07 PM AEST
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Awww.. so sad.....hope all is well, hun...
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Wishing You Were Still Here
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by SimplyMe on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 01:30:42 AM AEST
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You cease to amaze me Pix. Wonderful job. Your talent shows through more and more with each write. I loved it, as i always do. Yet i hate it when your sad. :-(
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Wishing You Were Still Here
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 16th March 2005 @ 06:56:09 AM AEST
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God now this is depressing, i know what you mean. Good writing as always.
Jane |
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