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Array ( [sid] => 8750 [catid] => 1 [aid] => Mick [title] => ~~Slither~~ [time] => 2002-12-17 12:20:00 [hometext] => Please comment!!! p.s .... this is fictional...so its all good! [bodytext] => I am hopelessly hypnotysed by you,
I am under your control.
I know you take me for granted,
But i want to be with you,
To feel what you feel.
You are my saviour,
You are my god.
You have Chained me up,
Thrown away the key,
And I am left to beg for you to love me.

You slap me hard across my face,
Your handprint still visable as tears stream down my cheek.
You have entwined me in your coils,
and played deep within my soul.
Bitten me with yor daggers and injected your deadly poison,
The poison you call "Love".

You know I am controlled by you,
That you are the sepreme being in my life....
My life is your life....
I can never let go... [comments] => 9 [counter] => 225 [topic] => 13 [informant] => Delusions [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 10 [ratings] => 2 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )

~~Slither~~

Contributed by Delusions on Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 12:20:00 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

I am hopelessly hypnotysed by you,
I am under your control.
I know you take me for granted,
But i want to be with you,
To feel what you feel.
You are my saviour,
You are my god.
You have Chained me up,
Thrown away the key,
And I am left to beg for you to love me.

You slap me hard across my face,
Your handprint still visable as tears stream down my cheek.
You have entwined me in your coils,
and played deep within my soul.
Bitten me with yor daggers and injected your deadly poison,
The poison you call "Love".

You know I am controlled by you,
That you are the sepreme being in my life....
My life is your life....
I can never let go...

Copyright © Delusions ... [ 2002-12-17 12:20:00]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by Ash on Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 01:40:46 PM AEST
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I'm totally enraptured by this poem, I've written a few about this kind of thing..and this one really displays what it's like in that kind of situation, and makes you feel it yourself. Keep it coming. PS The wording is very clever, too and it flows very nicely :)

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by wyrd_faerie on Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 04:12:58 PM AEST
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i love it...

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by OreO on Tuesday, 17th December 2002 @ 04:14:22 PM AEST
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Well im glad to hear that it's fictional because being in this place isn't fun, i've been here before and it was the most horriblest time of my life. They are very controlling and it's hard because when your scared to leave someone with that much power over you its almost impossible to escape this....but it is possible i found out....and im glad i did....don't ever let anyone do this to you, your words in this poem touched home with me pretty deeply. Slither is a good name for it...
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:.

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by Broken_Skin on Wednesday, 18th December 2002 @ 06:50:24 AM AEST
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its almost like a story.... its good.
xxx

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by GEQUETSCHT on Wednesday, 18th December 2002 @ 08:50:28 PM AEST
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I really REALLY liked reading this poem. Its, how could you say, a fantasy of mine to have Till Lindemann (lead singer of RAMMSTEIN) do this to me lol.. i know its odd...But this is really good. I really like this

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 0 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 28th December 2002 @ 07:13:59 AM AEST
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Hi, I have read them all but I would have to say that this is the one I like the best!!
You are a fantastic writer, however are you ok?? from KF........ Just kidding!!

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by LadyDama on Wednesday, 19th February 2003 @ 03:26:48 AM AEST
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excellent and intriguing...

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by unforgiven on Thursday, 30th September 2004 @ 02:22:32 AM AEST
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such raw emotion and imagery makes this one hell of a great poem huni....keep writing coz u inspire me!
becca

Re: ~~Slither~~ (User Rating: 1 )
by tWiStLe on Monday, 18th October 2004 @ 03:10:36 AM AEST
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i remember when u used to call babrer slither....u hated him that much...

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