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as she silently drew near
Icy fingers touching softy
"Shhhh love, have no fear'

As I cried to her for mercy:
"The pain, it won't last long
And when finally you awaken
I promise you'll be strong'

She left me then, to die alone
Upon the harsh, cold floor
"i'm so afraid' I whispered
As she slowly closed the door

So many nights there after
I stayed hidden in that room
Hating what she'd made of me
I vowed it'd be my tomb

Then as the moon rose late one night
I heard a cry below
A maiden's voice, so soft and sad
I could not help but go

I found her in the darkness
Her eyes so filled with fright
And as I neared, I pulled her close
And whispered in the night:

"I can help you, let me show you......"
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Birth of a Vampire

Contributed by LadyWynter on Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 07:19:17 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

"I can help you, let me show you'
as she silently drew near
Icy fingers touching softy
"Shhhh love, have no fear'

As I cried to her for mercy:
"The pain, it won't last long
And when finally you awaken
I promise you'll be strong'

She left me then, to die alone
Upon the harsh, cold floor
"i'm so afraid' I whispered
As she slowly closed the door

So many nights there after
I stayed hidden in that room
Hating what she'd made of me
I vowed it'd be my tomb

Then as the moon rose late one night
I heard a cry below
A maiden's voice, so soft and sad
I could not help but go

I found her in the darkness
Her eyes so filled with fright
And as I neared, I pulled her close
And whispered in the night:

"I can help you, let me show you......"

Copyright © LadyWynter ... [ 2005-02-22 19:19:17]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by tomt102444 on Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 07:39:53 PM AEST
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Ooooh! I like this poem. Easy to read; flows well. Story draws me in. First line repeated last and offering promise...

If only I could just pop something out like this...

Enjoyed the read. tom

Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by freckle on Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:39:53 PM AEST
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Really good write. Good imagery, good flow. Kinda creepy, but I liked it!

Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by arden on Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:55:17 PM AEST
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a cool vamp poem.
kinda dark, well written.
nice job.
5 stars
Arden

Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by Nazmythian on Wednesday, 23rd February 2005 @ 12:19:27 PM AEST
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Brilliant, I really like that. The cycle repeating and continuing, never ending. I appreciate the rhyme pattern held throughout. I have spent some time in a vampiric frame of mind ... but rhyming one of his stories I have yet to do. This is fabulous.

Nazzy ~

Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by Greg_Skellington on Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 12:27:09 PM AEST
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now this was good

greg

Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 1st March 2005 @ 07:53:35 PM AEST
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I adore poetic vampirism and have written pieces so, myself. Yet this is spectacular. I admire your intact rhyme scheme and meter, as well as the content in which flowed consistently and sequentially. There is much detail, in which I am in perfect awe of. This has essentially captured the many phases, post natal of a Vampire. Subtle and dark themes which have won over my heart! An interesting twist.

Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by Rylo on Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 06:28:50 PM AEST
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This is really awesome, I love it. Done to perfection.

Re: Birth of a Vampire (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Friday, 23rd May 2014 @ 06:01:04 PM AEST
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wicked good! this is sooo beautifully dark! i love
it, clever how you came around full circle too,

hugs n' love nessa

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