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Contributed by
deadheadpoet
on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 10:01:06 PM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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Up........
Late again
too many things
seem to occupy
one mind....
I calmly say..
quiet down in there.
I screamed silently
SHUT THE HELL UP IN THERE!
But.......
it........
continues...
The thoughts
The tangents
Never slowing down
its always been this way
Very frightening as a child
Not a real pussycat either
as I've aged
Not as if it's any easier as time
passes
I've just gotten wiser
Copyright ©
deadheadpoet
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by bluoreo on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 10:14:03 PM AEST (User
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I have the same exact problem. Good poem! |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rhymingron on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 10:28:20 PM AEST (User
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Good write, but then yours usually are. |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by DorianChambers on
Monday, 21st February 2005 @ 11:09:23 PM AEST (User
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very nice my peice of writting in deed, sounds
like unfinished bussiness, perhaps a 60ts
trip, peace and love 2 u my sister . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by mina-1 on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 07:47:08 AM AEST (User
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I totally agree with Ben on this one.
Sounds like unfinished business.
Keep up the great work. |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by bethie on
Tuesday, 22nd February 2005 @ 10:39:12 AM AEST (User
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I was just talking to someone today about this very thing. How it doesn't get any easier. Wished I had put it down like you did here.
Truly yours |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 11:55:10 PM AEST (User
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Excellent! Its written perfectly, but I especially like that last line. Very nicely done, thanks for sharing.
Take Care
- Becca |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th February 2005 @ 12:20:43 AM AEST (User
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Very cool. I had this problem too, adn while I was in Sri Lanka it was the worst it had ever been, but ever since getting back, no problem. Wow, Sri Lanka is the cure for insomnia!!!! |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 11:28:02 PM AEST (User
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I hear ya.
Your wiseness shows in this write.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by poorgirl on
Wednesday, 2nd March 2005 @ 09:14:18 AM AEST (User
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You must be the type of fat woman men just love. |
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Re: Up
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 12th March 2005 @ 12:33:30 AM AEST (User
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i loved this. excellent poem by any standards, laura. but this was my favorite line,
"SHUT THE HELL UP IN THERE!" lol. dont ask me why, just was. =] |
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