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[sid] => 84209
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => my family
[time] => 2005-02-13 06:56:49
[hometext] => Hi i'm johnny's son i'm 10 and this is my first poem dad helped me with the ending
[bodytext] => I'm drawing on the floor,
of our wooden shack,
my brother's home from sainsbury's
says he has got the sack,
blooming this and blooming that
mums boyfriend shouted loud
he just came from the pub
then called me mam a cow,
my sister just came to the door
and said hang on a mo,
to her boyfriend Tony
and her best friend Jo,
they treat me like i'm in the way,
as though i'm not there,
but i have other family that love me
so i don't really care,
I wish i could just fly away,
and then i could be free,
and maybe live in a big old house,
with just my dad and me.
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 447
[topic] => 21
[informant] => jackwilde
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 26
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Lifepoems
)
my family
Contributed by
jackwilde
on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 06:56:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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I'm drawing on the floor,
of our wooden shack,
my brother's home from sainsbury's
says he has got the sack,
blooming this and blooming that
mums boyfriend shouted loud
he just came from the pub
then called me mam a cow,
my sister just came to the door
and said hang on a mo,
to her boyfriend Tony
and her best friend Jo,
they treat me like i'm in the way,
as though i'm not there,
but i have other family that love me
so i don't really care,
I wish i could just fly away,
and then i could be free,
and maybe live in a big old house,
with just my dad and me.
Copyright ©
jackwilde
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2005-02-13 06:56:49]
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Re: my family
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 07:11:55 AM AEST
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| you done well jack! never mind you'll be living with daddy eventually xxx |
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Re: my family
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 07:26:10 AM AEST
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*Screams*
Johnny has a son?? This is some major news, wow i always thought of his a single guy, but how wrong was i.
Anyways this was really good, you did a wonderful poem with a lot of feelings into it, your doing good with your dad and i hope to see more of it.
Hugs,
Jane x |
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Re: my family
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 07:33:04 AM AEST
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Welcome Jack!
(Hmmmm, that name rings a bell.)
Well, it's obvious you've inherited your Dad's talent. I'd watch your caps a bit more, but you're off to an excellent start. I'm honored to the first to comment (I am the first, right?) on this poem. It's a winner, no doubt!
Stitch |
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Re: my family
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by Flipped_out on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 08:17:22 AM AEST
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jack this is fantastic, you sure do take after your Dad keep this up darling, you've got what it takes and your Dad adores you soooooooooo flippin much
huge hugzzzz Kelly xxx |
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Re: my family
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by dtborchert on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 10:21:25 AM AEST
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Excellent Job Jack. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.
Hugs,
Tena |
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Re: my family
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 03:31:01 PM AEST
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Well Jack, I've been a huge fan of your dad's ever since he was the first person to comment on my poetry. I must say I have a feeling I'll be a fan of your work as well. This is a great poem. I'm impressed... and you're just 10?
Well, I probably shouldn't say much about age. I'm only 17.
Anyway, Jack, I'm glad you're a writer like your dad. A writer is a grand thing to be.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
Chelsea |
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Re: my family
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by Jenn2004 on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 04:07:47 PM AEST
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| Good poem for a ten year old. I dont think i seen Johnnys poems on here before. |
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Re: my family
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by pixie on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 12:31:20 PM AEST
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wow so hard to believe you're only 10, you deffo do take after your Dad you have a gift for writing, I hope to read more from you soon Jack *hugs*
Pix xx |
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Re: my family
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 14th February 2005 @ 12:42:57 PM AEST
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Gosh, Jack --- I wish I had your talent when I was ten! Terrific write! You did an excellent job with this - I'm looking forward to reading more!
And ohhhh... you will fly, Jack --- I have no doubt of that!
Welcome to YPDC!
~SNM~
(oh and... tell you-know-who I'm not ignoring him... I just thought you might be growing tired of seeing his name all over your page. heheheheee *wink*)
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Re: my family
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by ammalu on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 07:01:50 AM AEST
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| Congrats., good expressions, keep it up. Hope for better ones in near future. MAY GOD BLESS U. |
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Re: my family
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by In2thetwilightzone on
Thursday, 17th February 2005 @ 07:33:40 AM AEST
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| awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww |
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Re: my family
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by Katie2008 on
Sunday, 20th March 2005 @ 02:43:49 PM AEST
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| aww, don't worry about them. Great poem |
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Re: my family
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 8th May 2005 @ 09:44:21 PM AEST
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a beautifully flowing poem, jack, ...i pray all your dreams come true, always be true to you:) hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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