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Array ( [sid] => 83877 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => me going...going...gone [time] => 2005-02-10 21:03:20 [hometext] => sry so long...but please comment [bodytext] => as my heart aches
my palm in pain
tears streaming down
my face

i pull this edge
over my wrists
every way i can
every way i will

i feel relieved
a weight lifted
off my shoulders
i dont feel anymore

as the blood
starts to flow
it comes more and more
my hands only red now

i lay there bleeding
no one comes

so as i lay
in my pool of blood
i whispered
i loved him always
and drifted away

everyones in black
as i lay there peacefully
stunned by their reactions
they honestly didnt care

some are laughing
some are smiling
some are w/ loved ones

then i look out
in the crowd
i see him

looking his worst
all in black
face redenned
from tears and anger

he screams at them
"WHY DONT YOU CARE!?"
he took his knife
and cut his wrists

said he loved me always
and couldnt live w/out me
he jabbed he knife
deep w/in his throat
the blood flowed

we're together now [comments] => 4 [counter] => 164 [topic] => 36 [informant] => visualizing_life [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Suicide )

me going...going...gone

Contributed by visualizing_life on Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 09:03:20 PM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

as my heart aches
my palm in pain
tears streaming down
my face

i pull this edge
over my wrists
every way i can
every way i will

i feel relieved
a weight lifted
off my shoulders
i dont feel anymore

as the blood
starts to flow
it comes more and more
my hands only red now

i lay there bleeding
no one comes

so as i lay
in my pool of blood
i whispered
i loved him always
and drifted away

everyones in black
as i lay there peacefully
stunned by their reactions
they honestly didnt care

some are laughing
some are smiling
some are w/ loved ones

then i look out
in the crowd
i see him

looking his worst
all in black
face redenned
from tears and anger

he screams at them
"WHY DONT YOU CARE!?"
he took his knife
and cut his wrists

said he loved me always
and couldnt live w/out me
he jabbed he knife
deep w/in his throat
the blood flowed

we're together now

Copyright © visualizing_life ... [ 2005-02-10 21:03:20]
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Re: me going...going...gone (User Rating: 1 )
by afterdark on Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 09:05:52 PM AEST
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This is like the 3rd suicide poem you have wrote..Do it or stop writing about wanting to kill yourself..

Re: me going...going...gone (User Rating: 1 )
by Red_October on Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 09:05:56 PM AEST
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love always seems to be such a beautiful tragedy, such is this poem. very good write. tiffany j.

Re: me going...going...gone (User Rating: 1 )
by heartbroken4ever on Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 09:13:14 PM AEST
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I like the poem
but personaly he ain't worth dying over
no man is ever worth dying for unless he does it first

Amber

Re: me going...going...gone (User Rating: 1 )
by Mandy2007 on Friday, 11th February 2005 @ 10:10:48 PM AEST
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WOW! that is a nice poem. He wanted to show you that he did care even if no one else did. Ignore the mean posts about you killing yourself and stop writing about it, people like that are jerks that just can't stop posting mean comments, if he/she wasn't suicidal what was he/she doing reading them?
DUH!
you can read some of mine if you want. i haven't posted latley tho.

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