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[aid] => mick
[title] => But For The Stars
[time] => 2005-02-05 00:31:45
[hometext] => *** Some doors.... are just harder to close than others ***
[bodytext] =>
It wasn’t the rose
But how you looked
As you stood there holding it
With stars in your eyes
But even stars
Tell lies
And it wasn’t
That I wanted truth
Rather, I needed to believe
In the impossible
For your truth
Wasn’t mine
It wasn’t forever
That I expected then
But one phenomenal moment
In the absence of time
But that moment
Had to die
Only now do I realize
How fully I gave
Myself to that moment
And only now can I admit
That it was already a lie, before
The petals of the rose had dried
But for the stars...
I had to try
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[counter] => 265
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[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[score] => 39
[ratings] => 8
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => LostLove
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But For The Stars
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 12:31:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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It wasn’t the rose
But how you looked
As you stood there holding it
With stars in your eyes
But even stars
Tell lies
And it wasn’t
That I wanted truth
Rather, I needed to believe
In the impossible
For your truth
Wasn’t mine
It wasn’t forever
That I expected then
But one phenomenal moment
In the absence of time
But that moment
Had to die
Only now do I realize
How fully I gave
Myself to that moment
And only now can I admit
That it was already a lie, before
The petals of the rose had dried
But for the stars...
I had to try
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
... [
2005-02-05 00:31:45]
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 12:47:33 AM AEST
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| WOW! This is absolutely gorgeous. It gave my goosebumps. Your use of words was perfect. Each one was so precise and of so much importance. Amazing work! I really love this poem of yours. |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by SocialMisfit on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 01:41:15 AM AEST
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this is touching it reminds me of a friend this is good.
SM |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Spike on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 02:12:18 AM AEST
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Hi SNM,
A strong write. Romantic idealism (read masochism when it isn't reciprocated or validated) is a persistent and evergreen theme in poetry.Your vehicle for it is a bittersweet acknowledgement of the folly of it all, but I share your sentiments - its worth the try. The alternative is far too barren.
Spike
P.S. 'But one phenomenal moment
In the absence of time' (Sigh)
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Re: But For The Stars
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 05:25:38 AM AEST
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What an absolute joy to be reading this, i have always adored the way you write. It's such a breath of fresh air and im glad i was able to read this brilliant poem.
Jane x |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 06:30:27 AM AEST
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| wow.. beautiful.. a masterpiece |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 11:44:45 AM AEST
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Wow, can I ever relate! Reminds me of something I wrote a long time ago.
This moved me.
Stitch |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by lostinmyself on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 03:49:17 PM AEST
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Oh Snemmy...this is gorgeous.
It wasn’t the rose
But how you looked
As you stood there holding it
With stars in your eyes
But even stars
Tell lies
Those first six lines just drew me in straight away, and this is so so true...
Stunning write sweetie,
I understand...
*hugs tight*
Phil xxx |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 05:13:30 PM AEST
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Bravo! I really enjoyed the format of this piece, as well as the graceful wording and beautiful imagery. Well done, indeed. There is a lingering sadness quite palpable about this.
Slàn
Andrew |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 08:06:50 PM AEST
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( sigh )
Sometimes my dear, the stars just aren't ready for you, even though you think you are ready for them.
Reach again ... they're waiting ~
Nazmythian ~
( beautifully penned poem Snemmy ) |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 9th February 2005 @ 08:17:55 PM AEST
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| i liked the philosophy and meaning in this most. your words were a close second though =] |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by mysticaldancer on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 10:58:40 PM AEST
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| very touching poem...can feel the emotion in every word |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 03:54:11 PM AEST
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| A beautifully written poem. |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by emystar on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 02:08:01 AM AEST
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A very strong, magical write.
a masterpeice.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th August 2005 @ 05:46:05 PM AEST
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| nice keep writin' |
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Re: But For The Stars
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th June 2006 @ 12:57:33 AM AEST
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*sighs*
Wow, I can really really relate to this poem. Interesting how powerfully truth can be expressed within poetic verse and you have done so perfectly in this poem.
But even stars
Tell lies
OMG, yes, they do!
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