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[aid] => mick
[title] => To have a friend
[time] => 2005-02-02 13:28:58
[hometext] => This is my first poem. I'm not very good but here goes.
[bodytext] => To have a friend is to have a heart
They're even with you when your apart
When we are together everything is bright
I think of these times every night
I don't know what else to say
Except that together is where we'll stay.
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To have a friend
Contributed by
shadowed_soul
on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 01:28:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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To have a friend is to have a heart
They're even with you when your apart
When we are together everything is bright
I think of these times every night
I don't know what else to say
Except that together is where we'll stay.
Copyright ©
shadowed_soul
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2005-02-02 13:28:58]
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Re: To have a friend
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 01:33:04 PM AEST
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treasure each friendship for they are very rare this is lovely by the way
Michelle |
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Re: To have a friend
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 01:36:20 PM AEST
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awww how sweet, friends are really hard to find, I can count my true friends on 2 hands
pix xx
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Re: To have a friend
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 01:36:43 PM AEST
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You've got a good start here. My suggestion is that you expand on it and remove the "I don't know what to say." In some long poems poised at particular moments, it might be appropriate, but I don't think in a poem so short that it has the effect you want. Beautiful sentiments however.
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Re: To have a friend
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by noone on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 02:00:27 PM AEST
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Hiya melissa! I really like this poem, short and sweet, its cool. I hope its about me,lol.
Brilliant start for us to become a poetry duo, what do you say? Overall, emotion shows through your writing, which is hard to achieve, keep it up!
Kirsty (your best friend,lol) |
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Re: To have a friend
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 02:15:32 PM AEST
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| Very well written,I really enjoyed this. |
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Re: To have a friend
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 03:11:50 PM AEST
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great style and flow, sweet true message, warm welcome to ypdc too:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: To have a friend
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by redtempest13 on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 05:12:46 PM AEST
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Great write! Keep up the good work. It was beautiful. :)
-Gin- |
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Re: To have a friend
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 12:31:30 PM AEST
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You're off to a good start. Watch your punctuation and spelling.
Stitch |
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Re: To have a friend
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by Jackee_line on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 06:20:01 PM AEST
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| Well done, look forward for more. |
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Re: To have a friend
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by misspurpledlw on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 10:18:54 AM AEST
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| Please continue to share, I enjoyed reading your first effort, Miss Purple |
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