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So I Sit Here....
Contributed by
TAGT
on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 09:08:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Copyright 2005 by TAGT
So I sit here, heart cold & gray.
So I sit here, starin at the wall all day.
So I sit here, wishing I could be with you.
So I sit here, knowing you'll never be mine and I never will be yours.
So I sit here, wanting to cry but no tears flow.
So I sit here, wanting to scream but no voice to be heard.
So I sit here, always waiting for someone to take my hand.
So I sit here, lonely because nobody will reach and understand.
So I move there, hoping to find someone just like you.
So I move there, searching for hapiness, peace and truth.
So I move there, tired & torn walking the streets alone.
So I move there, realizing there will never be another you.
So I stand here, observing others kissing, hugging, and in love.
So I stand here, my soul in pain and I am praying.
So I stand here, wanting to die but something tells me to keep on livin.
So I stand here, and catch a glimpse of someone from the corner of my eye.
So I see there, looks like you walking by.
So I see there, you turn around and look me straight in the eye.
So I see there, my soulmate just pass me by.
So I see there, you've now gone so far away.
So I fall here, my tears flowing into the drain.
So I fall here, my screams echo and is finally heard and I am in so much pain.
So I fall here, and hear you whisper in my ear.
So I listen there, you tell me you love me and everything is going to be o.k.
So I listen there, your voice warm & beautiful as you take me by the hand.
So I listen there, as you tell me to sit here.
And you move there closer to me.
And you stand here, right next to me, as I see you there, fall here, right into me.
We hold on to each other dearly.
So I lay here, alarm clock ringing.
So I lay here, awaken & realizing this is all just a dream.
Copyright ©
TAGT
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2005-01-24 21:08:03]
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Re: So I Sit Here....
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 09:38:10 PM AEST
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| it is pointless to repeat the same words over and over. they lose their meaning, power, and emotion. they become monotonous. so if a poem was written for any of these reasons, the format would ruin it. if it was just a poem, the monotonous tone destroys it. the rhyme scheme needs work, since this seemed to be going for more of a formatted style than freestyle. |
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Re: So I Sit Here....
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by TAGT on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 10:31:49 PM AEST
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| Thanks a lot for the comment but that is what makes this poem unique. It was written this way on purpose and has a special vibe to it. Notice the creative ending on lines 26-28 where I took a line from each sentences up above, combined them all, and made them into entirely new meanings... "listen there, sit here, move there, stand here, see there, fall here." |
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Re: So I Sit Here....
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by TheRaven on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 09:24:23 AM AEST
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i enjoyed the repeated beginnings, and loved how you switched it up. great write
the raven |
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