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I'm gettin really annoyed, I just need to relax
and go to the happy place within my mind
it's the only place I can go that no one else can find
It's my own little sanctuary with all my hopes and dreams
It's much better than the real world or so it seems
at first everything's beautiful, in harmony and peace
then you hear the screaming, and wish for the firing to cease
you run into an alley and see the people lying still
the blood and gore never ends, as you get the urge to kill
after finding a bayonet, you start slicing through live people
with luck yuo find a sniper rifle and stake out a church steeple
as you line up a shot, your surroundings begin to fade
after looking toward the floor, you see your in need of first-aid
you were shot in the leg and didn't even see the rest
finally you see the blood coming from your chest
you fall back onto the floor as you look up at your killer
there he was posted up on a wooden pillar
as you start to black out, you reach for your gun
and take the last shot in hurry before your done
as your life slips away, you see him fall to the floor
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The World Within My Mind

Contributed by PsychoticDreamz on Friday, 6th December 2002 @ 09:30:00 AM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry

It's like I'm standing on a bridge, waiting for it's collapse
I'm gettin really annoyed, I just need to relax
and go to the happy place within my mind
it's the only place I can go that no one else can find
It's my own little sanctuary with all my hopes and dreams
It's much better than the real world or so it seems
at first everything's beautiful, in harmony and peace
then you hear the screaming, and wish for the firing to cease
you run into an alley and see the people lying still
the blood and gore never ends, as you get the urge to kill
after finding a bayonet, you start slicing through live people
with luck yuo find a sniper rifle and stake out a church steeple
as you line up a shot, your surroundings begin to fade
after looking toward the floor, you see your in need of first-aid
you were shot in the leg and didn't even see the rest
finally you see the blood coming from your chest
you fall back onto the floor as you look up at your killer
there he was posted up on a wooden pillar
as you start to black out, you reach for your gun
and take the last shot in hurry before your done
as your life slips away, you see him fall to the floor
you die a happy death, as my world is no more

Copyright © PsychoticDreamz ... [ 2002-12-06 09:30:00]
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Re: The World Within My Mind (User Rating: 1 )
by LOWMAN613 on Friday, 6th December 2002 @ 09:39:36 AM AEST
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This is pretty dark,but well writen!
Christina

Re: The World Within My Mind (User Rating: 1 )
by Icequeen on Saturday, 7th December 2002 @ 03:47:47 PM AEST
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Really well written, v. dark, but its real, it happens, its true, even if its only in your head. (happens to me ?!) excellent :).
IceQ

Re: The World Within My Mind (User Rating: 1 )
by Sonibe on Saturday, 7th December 2002 @ 05:30:55 PM AEST
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....Wow....O.O....amazing! I know this feeling almost exactly, except my required weapon was the Sword....I read this poem in awe, this is a true "work of art".....keep up the good work....

Re: The World Within My Mind (User Rating: 1 )
by OreO on Saturday, 7th December 2002 @ 10:23:30 PM AEST
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You have these thoughts in your head when your mind drifts and sways eh?....I don't think that makes you evil or sadistic at all i think alot of people have these thoughts sometimes...maybe not everyone but who's going to admit that they have...i think it took alot of bravery to admit you have thoughts like this, i know i've had thoughts like this as well. Thanks for sharing this one i enjoyed it alot...it's very dark and beautifully written...
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:.

Re: The World Within My Mind (User Rating: 1 )
by cryingonmyporch on Friday, 3rd January 2003 @ 11:04:48 PM AEST
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I like the poem and I do a lot of dark poetry. My best poem on here is my suicide note so I mean Chit happens and you know sometime you can't really stop what things run in and out of your mind. I'm going to read your other poems.
Always
Amy

Re: The World Within My Mind (User Rating: 1 )
by ghostbear on Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 09:04:56 PM AEST
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Babbling-you're nckname says it all. Try pose, you'll be better at it.

Re: The World Within My Mind (User Rating: 1 )
by BlackFire9786 on Saturday, 12th July 2003 @ 02:54:01 PM AEST
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wow this is a dark poem....but wonderful....i loved it....you write so well, keep it up. Lisa

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