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[aid] => mick
[title] => Apparent Disregard
[time] => 2005-01-18 00:27:28
[hometext] => *** I turned my brain upside down... and this fell out ****
[bodytext] =>
I birthed Idiocy
And swaddled him in
Almost too tight blankets
Beneath the broken window pane
He cries
I refuse to say his name
He needs me
Yet I dismiss him, in
Favor of someone else’s dream
He thrashes about in dirty clothes
And wails
I leave amidst his screams
"Wicked," they say
And I do not disagree
But they see neither him nor me
Drowning in a sea of infant tears
Knowing
I had to set him free
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[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ratings] => 8
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Apparent Disregard
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Silent-No-More
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Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 12:27:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I birthed Idiocy
And swaddled him in
Almost too tight blankets
Beneath the broken window pane
He cries
I refuse to say his name
He needs me
Yet I dismiss him, in
Favor of someone else’s dream
He thrashes about in dirty clothes
And wails
I leave amidst his screams
"Wicked," they say
And I do not disagree
But they see neither him nor me
Drowning in a sea of infant tears
Knowing
I had to set him free
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Silent-No-More
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2005-01-18 00:27:28]
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Arsenic on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 06:46:50 AM AEST
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| That is one of the more creative poems I've read lately. Good job. |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 07:52:28 AM AEST
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Very thought provoking write.
luv, huggs,
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 04:18:01 AM AEST
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Taking this too literally would be idiocy in itself, i'm sure although I am apt to want to read this over and over until I get more of this picture, painting an eventual understanding acceptance of one's own limitations . . . incapacities . . . failures??
I'm struggling for the right word, but I think I get the impression . . .
Knowing how it feels,
N_F |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by n2dep2care on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 09:43:12 AM AEST
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Very deep and visual. Personally meaningful to me. Very well done! Great title also.
Laurie |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 03:01:26 PM AEST
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Hunni, it's been way too long since I stopped by your page..
And I am so glad I did now.
Though I am still not sure what to make of your poetry, I still love it.
I wish I could write a poem as creative as this.
Having to read this again,
Phil xxx
(Who adores poems like this, but is bad at commenting on them. lol)
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 01:13:51 PM AEST
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On the surface I almost had to laugh. It sounded like you might be talking about an ex.
But I know you too well and this piece has more depth than people realize....great job you!!! |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Sapphire_Blue on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 07:27:22 AM AEST
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| Weird write, unique and interestng to read, certainly creative. |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 09:34:07 AM AEST
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I wont even try to say I understand this, not until I have had time to digest every morsel of hidden meaning.
I will say, that your writing has that.....magic.....
that stirs every reader into deep contemplation.
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 11:37:06 AM AEST
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I can relate to this on several levels. Don't we all have our struggles?
Stitch |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 11:48:47 AM AEST
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Very poignant message - nice to illicit the feelings of a mother to child - we create, and destroy, and struggle with those choices, even when we know the right thing to do.
Anyway, that is what it speaks to this reader -
Nice job - |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 04:02:34 PM AEST
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| A very great poem that shows tons of creativity. Wonderful job. |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st May 2005 @ 12:25:26 PM AEST
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| It's... interesting. A good metaphor that can be applied to many things; a poem for instance, that just can't be expressed at present time. I like this much, Snemmy. J. |
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Re: Apparent Disregard
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th June 2006 @ 01:44:58 AM AEST
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Hmmmm.....how very interesting. Again, very creative.
Timbo
(who wishes he could also set his idiocy free)
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