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[aid] => mick
[title] => Beyond the Memories
[time] => 2005-01-17 11:27:36
[hometext] => Dying In My Dreams pt. III
[bodytext] => but I don’t feel right when you’re gone…
Lost and lonely, my heart just so bruised
True love fading and past love confused
Knowing my heart only held room for one
And at that time, my love was all or none
His arms were my comfort, tears shed truth
So much bravery in all his youth
Oh, the feelings inside when he stepped up
Looked into my soul – just breathed - keep your chin up
Took me away from my life, so they
Tried their best to make him fade away
They had to know they would never win
‘Cause I felt so free blowing in the wind
Then one day he said his world was me
So much beauty I couldn’t believe
For just a moment I closed my eyes
- blink -
Then I was alone, traumatized, no goodbyes
A little scared and lonely again
He said “listen to this song, and then
“When you hear it, think of me, be strong
“Please, I need you to love me when I’m gone”
And I did, I swear, but as time passed
I found I could not find what he’d asked
Outside myself, beyond memories
His tears, his strength, the way he (used to?) feel…
I still get lost inside that song…
But no one here will find me
So all alone yet never free
And although this is all wrong
There’s so much ground to build upon…
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 792
[topic] => 24
[informant] => MoonlitAngel
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 26
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => LoveRemembered
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Beyond the Memories
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 11:27:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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but I don’t feel right when you’re gone…
Lost and lonely, my heart just so bruised
True love fading and past love confused
Knowing my heart only held room for one
And at that time, my love was all or none
His arms were my comfort, tears shed truth
So much bravery in all his youth
Oh, the feelings inside when he stepped up
Looked into my soul – just breathed - keep your chin up
Took me away from my life, so they
Tried their best to make him fade away
They had to know they would never win
‘Cause I felt so free blowing in the wind
Then one day he said his world was me
So much beauty I couldn’t believe
For just a moment I closed my eyes
- blink -
Then I was alone, traumatized, no goodbyes
A little scared and lonely again
He said “listen to this song, and then
“When you hear it, think of me, be strong
“Please, I need you to love me when I’m gone”
And I did, I swear, but as time passed
I found I could not find what he’d asked
Outside myself, beyond memories
His tears, his strength, the way he (used to?) feel…
I still get lost inside that song…
But no one here will find me
So all alone yet never free
And although this is all wrong
There’s so much ground to build upon…
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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2005-01-17 11:27:36]
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by ShadowDaughter on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 11:53:41 PM AEST
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awww . . . love it. Especially the end.
It's so weird how I can actually follow along and think, "whoa, that must be ___" for each one . . . meh. I hate that you have so many to write about. Heartbreak . . . mrrrgh *makes sound like drain being closed*. When karma catches up with you someday (time is ticking, karma, hurry your ass up), call me up so I can celebrate with you.
great job, creamsicle.
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 04:39:56 AM AEST
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Wow, that was just awesome Dee. Every part of your poem is just mesmerizing. This is composed so well too. Great job
Jane x
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by Mystical_Raven on
Tuesday, 18th January 2005 @ 11:01:24 PM AEST
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| Wow.....Hmmmm........I'm glad i pay attention to these now....*nods* |
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by Black13 on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 10:51:35 PM AEST
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This one was a little different than the other two...
I don't know what to make of it just yet.
I liked it alot but... I'll wait to make further comments when I can read it clear again. |
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 12:16:11 AM AEST
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Well, just beautiful. A lot of this resonated with me, but I am not practiced at expressing such feelings, so I cannot quite say what.
Very moving.
Blessings
Andrew |
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 06:09:44 AM AEST
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Just breath taking memories.."Then one day he said his world was me..So much beauty I couldn’t believe..For just a moment I closed my eyes- blink -Then I was alone, traumatized, no goodbyes"...:-) venkat
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 01:19:16 AM AEST
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dear dee this is so beautiful with its well woven words and beautiful flowing song of poetry, hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 11th May 2005 @ 10:15:17 PM AEST
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A beautiful and heartwarming write. Speaks to love, commitment and loyalty.
Well done,
Will |
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by waos on
Monday, 16th May 2005 @ 11:40:39 PM AEST
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sweet stuff... i hadn't read anything of yours lately, but this reminded me that
its surely worth the time and effort. Nice write.
~Kara |
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Re: Beyond the Memories
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by exiled on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 01:03:00 AM AEST
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that is a beautiful poem. You never seem to dissapoint keep the words flowing. Oh yeah and moonlit can i be your sugar daddy? lol!
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