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that i need you to help me fight

i know everybody needs rain

but i'm Drowning in it
and i Literally feel as if
i'm Choking on life

what's wrong with me that there's air all around me and i still can't breath

please help me
i'm suffocating
the sun
only burns me
your hand
has the strength
to help
to help pull me out

and i'm begging you if you have ever wanted to help me now's your chance . . .

with tears in my eyes i ask you
Please don't leave me now -
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rain

Contributed by kaleidoscope_glasses on Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 01:42:38 PM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

and it's this black cloud that keeps raining upon my spirit
that i need you to help me fight

i know everybody needs rain

but i'm Drowning in it
and i Literally feel as if
i'm Choking on life

what's wrong with me that there's air all around me and i still can't breath

please help me
i'm suffocating
the sun
only burns me
your hand
has the strength
to help
to help pull me out

and i'm begging you if you have ever wanted to help me now's your chance . . .

with tears in my eyes i ask you
Please don't leave me now -

Copyright © kaleidoscope_glasses ... [ 2005-01-16 13:42:38]
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Re: rain (User Rating: 1 )
by Pyrofungus on Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 01:53:59 PM AEST
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so sad...caught in such sadness...desprete cry for help...to be shot down, or to be helped that is the question...that we all face when we are pleading on your knees and being drowned in all of this "rain"

good poem...if you ever need to talk to me send me a message...
please comment on my work too
summer

Re: rain (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 01:56:57 PM AEST
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Emotionally expressive. Hard not to give advice with a poem like this crying for help. If you need a hug, I send you one of mine. Blessings.

Re: rain (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 02:54:14 PM AEST
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Wow...very emotional and powerful. Beautifully written.

Re: rain (User Rating: 1 )
by biggredd on Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 07:14:55 PM AEST
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wow....this is really good. I can tell that a lot of personal feelings and emotions went into this poem. I am sorry if this is something that is going on in your life. Just try and hold on for as long as possible. Please comment on some of my stuff,too. Keep up the good work, and drop me a line.

Bigg Redd

Re: rain (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 12:37:32 AM AEST
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you wrote an excellent ending. you also have the strength, in your heart.

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