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she's been there forever
just sitting in vain
she figured he'd come back
but nobody came,

life dances and flashes
she watches the plains
trees swaying and weaving
birds sing a refrain,

she sits out her vigil
her heart feels a strain
no one speaks to her ever
pain leaves her urbane,

cascading snowflakes alight
on her hair, her domain
the seasons all whisper
she breathes out his name,

her mind seems to wander
as down come the rains
it too, leaves her lonely
insanity obtained,

she's been there forever
just sitting in vain
she figured he'd come back
but nobody came.

§* *§
*|*

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waiting...

Contributed by ladyfawn on Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 10:47:07 PM in AEST
Topic: Grief

she's been there forever
just sitting in vain
she figured he'd come back
but nobody came,

life dances and flashes
she watches the plains
trees swaying and weaving
birds sing a refrain,

she sits out her vigil
her heart feels a strain
no one speaks to her ever
pain leaves her urbane,

cascading snowflakes alight
on her hair, her domain
the seasons all whisper
she breathes out his name,

her mind seems to wander
as down come the rains
it too, leaves her lonely
insanity obtained,

she's been there forever
just sitting in vain
she figured he'd come back
but nobody came.

§* *§
*|*

Copyright Â© ladyfawn ... [ 2005-01-09 22:47:07]
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Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 11:03:59 PM AEST
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Oh this is sad. I hope he does show. You portray loneliness and the pain of waiting very well. Cheers!

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by autumngreeneyes on Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 11:19:53 PM AEST
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hahaha...this is sooo sad, and it sounds like me.. I love that music..If you find a cello..let me know..:-)

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by pUnKa_RaCh on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 12:26:10 AM AEST
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wow, like everyone said yes this is extremely sad and a very emotional write.
i like the way you made it all seem hopeless. wonderful, great poem

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 12:53:08 AM AEST
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But nobody came...waiting invain..hmm..sad humming..aww, hugs my dear frined :-)venkat

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by blowfish_jane on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 01:51:50 AM AEST
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Nessa this is such a sad moving write, once again you have writen this with so much beauty in to it. Great write.

Hugs,
Jane x

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 04:54:02 AM AEST
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Such sadness & longing in your words.... a truly beautiful piece of poetry!!

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by NoSaint on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 06:37:24 AM AEST
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beautifully written...softly the sadness is portrayed.

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 07:39:08 AM AEST
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wow Nessa, this is deep and emotional, I cant tell you how much I have missed you and your poetry *hugs* great to see you posting again hun,
love pixie xx

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Fwog on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 11:54:30 AM AEST
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Ladyfawn,
As always your poetry leaves me in awe, this is such a beautiful write.
I especially love the line insanity obtained.
You truly are a real wordsmith.
Hugs
Dal

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Stitch on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 12:58:36 PM AEST
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It is sad the entanglements of the heart that destroy the soul and snuff out the roots of life.
Stitch

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by OnAngelswings on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 02:21:11 PM AEST
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wonderfully written...I love your style of writtting...Shari

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Ravensfire on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 03:11:44 PM AEST
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felt this one in my heart, my very soul, very good write, ty.

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by sweetangeluk on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 05:28:46 PM AEST
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Pictured an indian woman sitting down head in hands crying.
Made me cry. The music was so very beautiful as was your poem it was so sad.

Nice to see you posting again.

Terrific awesome write

Love Sweetangelukxxxx

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Whitelightning77 on Monday, 10th January 2005 @ 06:15:28 PM AEST
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This was a moving write for a such a sad topic.

thanks for sharing!

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by wray on Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 06:22:25 AM AEST
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Brings to mind a silverchair song... probably not what you wanted to hear lol I think it's something to do with the repeated stanza at the end, ending the poem with "but nobody came." Very lonely. But a beautiful poem...

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Alovinmann on Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 04:57:05 PM AEST
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talk to me you seem so sad
love P

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by the_Ghost_Moth on Wednesday, 12th January 2005 @ 05:21:42 PM AEST
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Someone on your mind?

These are not my favorites of yours,
but I have seen you more
accomplished
and look forward to what you do next.

--Ghosty

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Spazzo on Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 07:06:55 PM AEST
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I am sorry. I hope he comes. Great poem too.

Spazzo

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Rakerman1999 on Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 09:58:31 AM AEST
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Nessa, I've been so self absorbed that I missed this write. It's beautiful in it's sadness my dear friend. I wish I could help you to be happy again.

Roses at your feet ,my daisy
Larry

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by SweetRhythm on Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 05:21:33 AM AEST
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Beautiful sad endearing write with feelings & emotions very well portrayed. A picture very well painted. One really does hope of his return.

Corinna

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Sapphire_Blue on Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 07:22:59 AM AEST
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Very sad poem, yet powerful words used to weave this sorrowful tale, I hope the wait is rewarded soon.

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Cynthia on Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 11:36:17 PM AEST
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Oh Nessa, how I've missed reading your writes. This was such a heart felt write. I liked it and the music too. *S* Cynthia

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Stalkee on Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 12:21:16 AM AEST
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I am, yet again, amazed by your poetry...your every line captivates me...another brilliant write, but so sad...keep it up, i know you will

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 07:45:12 PM AEST
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Wonderful write. I can certainly relate. I love your use of imagery.

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by wolfman on Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 04:37:28 PM AEST
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I am sorry that he hasnt came yeat and I do hope that you will get through, someone will come for you and then all will be well with your soul tell then be at peace and be strong.

I liked this one too it was very well writing and portrayed your emotions very well done (sorry thatit took me so long to read this one.) read you later. God bless

wolfman

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Spazzo on Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 10:56:16 PM AEST
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This is pretty sad. And I have read this before but I just thought I would comment on it again cos your poems are nice and to refresh my memory.

Scott

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by tifrob on Thursday, 10th February 2005 @ 01:21:32 AM AEST
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Nessa, I loved this one. It's so sad and picturesque. You did good.

~Me~

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 07:30:35 PM AEST
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guess u can guess I' a million miles behind.
Great masterpeice as always.
luv, huggs,
emy

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Friday, 11th March 2005 @ 04:48:33 AM AEST
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ugh! What is up with my lack of comments?! Shesh! This is a stunning write hun, truly heart wrenching, and yet beautiful in a way that only you can write. Masterpiece.

Hugs 'n Love
- Becca

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by Twisterchaser on Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 09:50:26 PM AEST
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I know the feeling my beautiful little one. Sometimes they don't go away they just drift out of the way. To be in the back ground.

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by positivelypurple on Thursday, 26th April 2007 @ 09:08:17 AM AEST
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Wow...I can really relate to this. Beautiful.

All the best,

Laurel

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by needledancing on Monday, 28th May 2007 @ 10:47:47 PM AEST
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This is a fantastic piece which brought back memories of a long wait that ended an empty one. Excelllent.

Re: waiting... (User Rating: 1 )
by colinb on Monday, 14th July 2014 @ 05:09:25 PM AEST
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beautiful Nessa

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