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Shattered soul
Drift apart
An empty hole
Hollow eyes
Ashen skin
Lives a lie
Lives in sin
Feigns her joy
Feels but pain
Hearts a toy
Sorrow rains
Takes the blade
Frigid touch
New scars made
Hoped too much
One last scar
Down her wrist
For her to mar
No longer exist
Blood cascades
Crimson ink
Unafraid
To death she’ll sink
Eternal rest
Slips into death
“It’s for the best”
Her one last breath
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One Last Breath

Contributed by EternalNight4x on Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 11:47:59 AM in AEST
Topic: Suicide

Fragile heart
Shattered soul
Drift apart
An empty hole
Hollow eyes
Ashen skin
Lives a lie
Lives in sin
Feigns her joy
Feels but pain
Hearts a toy
Sorrow rains
Takes the blade
Frigid touch
New scars made
Hoped too much
One last scar
Down her wrist
For her to mar
No longer exist
Blood cascades
Crimson ink
Unafraid
To death she’ll sink
Eternal rest
Slips into death
“It’s for the best”
Her one last breath

Copyright Â© EternalNight4x ... [ 2005-01-05 11:47:59]
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Re: One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by pixie on Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 11:48:48 AM AEST
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great flow, a very tragic write
pixie xx

Re: One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by Tru2Myself on Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 11:59:07 AM AEST
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great poem. I really liked it. not great one for me to read at this very moment though. Ha. great poem i like your style. Lauren

Re: One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by TaintedSoul on Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 12:11:28 PM AEST
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Simplistic and tragic. Emotions bled well within the words, a concise write. Hope the world lightens for you soon.

peace
TS

Re: One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by autumngreeneyes on Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 02:27:44 PM AEST
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love the way this is done..one word into the next..

Re: One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by Bridget_theMidget_Powerz on Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 06:06:18 PM AEST
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This is great on every scale, the flow, the wording, the structure, I am very much impressed, you have much potentail

Re: One Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by Crash on Thursday, 6th January 2005 @ 01:50:54 PM AEST
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I love this piece of work! it flows, pours emotion, and hits close to home

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