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A Moment
Contributed by
hoidy
on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:05:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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When I look into her eyes,
A moment frozen in my life.
Time slows down,
My heart speeds up.
The sun and moon fade away,
The weather disappears.
My mind blanks out the worthless worries,
All my troubles are forgotten.
I hope; I dream,
I guess; I wonder.
I know not what to think,
I know not what she thinks.
I dream of hopes,
I hope for dreams.
I want her love,
I love her wants.
So many thoughts run through my mind,
The moment our eyes meet.
Time speeds up,
My heart slows down.
That moment over, for now.
Copyright ©
hoidy
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2004-12-28 23:05:09] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:17:42 PM AEST (User
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Beautiful. "I want her love. I love her wants." That's just about the sweetest thing you could say about someone you love. Great poem! Cheers!
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stonedraider23 on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:19:43 PM AEST (User
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Great write keep it up |
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by smooshable on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:20:16 PM AEST (User
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I started reading this and thought "oh great, another secret love peom" but there are two incredible verses in it.
I hope; I dream,
I guess; I wonder.
I know not what to think,
I know not what she thinks.
I dream of hopes,
I hope for dreams.
I want her love,
I love her wants.
These to me just sum up perfectly what it is to be secretly in love yet are unique to this poem. Because secret love is only about one person, "I". It really has nothing to do with the other person at all and those two verses just capture that in the most incredible way. |
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:30:11 PM AEST (User
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And a beautyfull moment at that.
A masterpeice as it reaches into the soul-n-reminds us that there is still luv, fasination and mermerizing on this planet.
Thanks for sharing this as it's always nice to feell someone eles's inner joy.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:48:12 PM AEST (User
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"I dream of hopes,
I hope for dreams.
I want her love,
I love her wants."
Absolutely beautiful |
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by pUnKa_RaCh on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 11:48:43 PM AEST (User
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this is a great write....u have had a moment similar to this........you've captured it well. thanks for sharing. |
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 12:39:06 AM AEST (User
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This is just beautiful, its brilliantly writen. good job
Hugs.
Jane x |
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Re: A Moment
(User Rating: 1 ) by The_Callif on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 02:26:11 AM AEST (User
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great job, i liked this poem alot!! |
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