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Array ( [sid] => 77052 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Within a Breath... [time] => 2004-12-23 17:39:25 [hometext] => IT's a Big metaphor to an event that happened in my life a while ago and NO i don't want to kill myself! [bodytext] => This girl is afraid
She's afraid to jump
But this is her chance to get away
She hesitates
To her misery she is a slave
Stuck between whether to go or stay
She asks the Lord for advice every time she prays
Her mind is paralized
Judgement impaired
One and only way of escape
One qustion left-
Does she dare?
Her blood is racing
Time stands still
This is her decision
Not against her will
She's on the verge of drowning
She's in so deep
The hot water is rising
It's surprising she survived to say,
"My prayers are answered"
-She took the leap [comments] => 3 [counter] => 187 [topic] => 43 [informant] => Iyah-Adele [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => oops )

Within a Breath...

Contributed by Iyah-Adele on Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 05:39:25 PM in AEST
Topic: oops

This girl is afraid
She's afraid to jump
But this is her chance to get away
She hesitates
To her misery she is a slave
Stuck between whether to go or stay
She asks the Lord for advice every time she prays
Her mind is paralized
Judgement impaired
One and only way of escape
One qustion left-
Does she dare?
Her blood is racing
Time stands still
This is her decision
Not against her will
She's on the verge of drowning
She's in so deep
The hot water is rising
It's surprising she survived to say,
"My prayers are answered"
-She took the leap

Copyright © Iyah-Adele ... [ 2004-12-23 17:39:25]
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Re: Within a Breath... (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 05:59:29 PM AEST
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Very powerful poem. I look forward to reading more of your work. :-)

Re: Within a Breath... (User Rating: 1 )
by silverjade on Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 08:06:38 PM AEST
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wow, this was amazing keep on the good writes

Re: Within a Breath... (User Rating: 1 )
by Pyrofungus on Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 08:21:30 PM AEST
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very nice...i'm glad that "this girl" took the leap and made the right decision to get away and not stay in such a place that she feels is not right for her....you did a great job!

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