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[aid] => mick
[title] => Cuts
[time] => 2004-12-18 14:56:22
[hometext] => This is how i felt the night i wrote this
[bodytext] => Cuts on my wrist,
Cuts on my thigh,
It didn't go in that deep,
So I give it another try,
The pain gets worse,
As I start to cry,
My life’s so screwed up,
I just wanna die,
My blood falls down,
It begins to drip,
My skin is tearing,
And my heart beings to rip,
I despise my life,
I want another,
But it can’t be fixed now,
So why even bother.
These tears that I cry,
I fear will never end,
I need to cut deeper,
For these feelings are not pretend,
I must cut more,
Because I hate my life,
The needle is not sharp enough,
So I grab a knife,
It hurts so much,
It goes so much deeper,
And as I lose more blood,
I start to feel weaker,
I'm getting dizzy now,
I feel like i’m gonna faint,
Because now the blood is pouring out,
Like a waterfall of red paint.
People said they cared about me,
But it was a bunch of lies,
And now because of them,
I’m about to commit suicide.
[comments] => 13
[counter] => 390
[topic] => 59
[informant] => burningintherain14
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[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 20
[ratings] => 4
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => psychoticpoems
)
Cuts
Contributed by
burningintherain14
on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 02:56:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Cuts on my wrist,
Cuts on my thigh,
It didn't go in that deep,
So I give it another try,
The pain gets worse,
As I start to cry,
My life’s so screwed up,
I just wanna die,
My blood falls down,
It begins to drip,
My skin is tearing,
And my heart beings to rip,
I despise my life,
I want another,
But it can’t be fixed now,
So why even bother.
These tears that I cry,
I fear will never end,
I need to cut deeper,
For these feelings are not pretend,
I must cut more,
Because I hate my life,
The needle is not sharp enough,
So I grab a knife,
It hurts so much,
It goes so much deeper,
And as I lose more blood,
I start to feel weaker,
I'm getting dizzy now,
I feel like i’m gonna faint,
Because now the blood is pouring out,
Like a waterfall of red paint.
People said they cared about me,
But it was a bunch of lies,
And now because of them,
I’m about to commit suicide.
Copyright ©
burningintherain14
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2004-12-18 14:56:22]
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Re: Cuts
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by Artemis03 on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 03:18:00 PM AEST
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| I like this poem a lot..very emotional..I've felt like this to on those really bad days.Great Write. |
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by CrimsonTears on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 03:21:05 PM AEST
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i know this feeling all to well....i liked this alot...great job....awesome poem
Lots of Love
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by xbleedingheart on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 04:10:59 PM AEST
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| really amazing and very strong. |
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Re: Cuts
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by n2dep2care on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 04:15:34 PM AEST
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Powerful piece, very commanding in a sad way. Loved the emotion in this very much. Well done!
Laurie |
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Re: Cuts
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by blueyes11 on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 04:34:59 PM AEST
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| Wow, this is extremely powerful. The imagery is amazing. The sense of desparation was heartbreaking. Please, don't ever give up on yourself or on life. There is someone that cares about you more than you can imagine: God. And even though it seems you may have no hope, believe me you do. Keep writing, you seem to be able to turn your pain into raw, talented work! |
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by DesolantDreamer on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 05:19:01 PM AEST
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| It is so angry...so hateful. I love it. I am reading a book called CUT. It is sorta like this. I like your talent. You have real potential. |
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Re: Cuts
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by blackholesun on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 09:01:33 PM AEST
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| all i can say is ive felt that way and i hope you dont go thru with it,i tried before to quit cutting and i found that i cant quit by myself,my point being im gonna get myself help before i feel like how you feel again.i hope that you find the will to live,love&peace fellow poet |
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by BEBE on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 11:38:11 PM AEST
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| Hi, i have been in that situation numerous tymes,and let me tell u it is totally not worth it. my life was crap, but god helped me through, and i know if he helped me, he is there right now to help u |
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Re: Cuts
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by pixie on
Sunday, 19th December 2004 @ 06:47:46 AM AEST
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deep and very grim, I used to think like this, hope one day you can get over these feelings, well expressed write
pixie xx |
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Re: Cuts
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 10:22:31 PM AEST
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Beautiful work.
"Because now the blood is pouring out,
Like a waterfall of red paint."
Great imagery!
I've felt like this too, but just remember that all things are better in the end. You're a very good poet and I look forward to reading more of your work.
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Re: Cuts
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by Dorkfish on
Monday, 20th June 2005 @ 03:25:27 PM AEST
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| Very powerful! Amazing piece! So real and sad. I do want you to know though that whatever made you feel that way, it will get better. You have an amazing talent. You are a great writer. But please try and get some help instead of cutting yourself or trying to kill yourself, it's NOT worth it. I had a friend who killed herself. It was very selfish! Please think about your loved ones who had nothing to do with what's bothering you. Or think of the people who WILL be important to you someday. Keep up the good writes though! |
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Re: Cuts
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by hellsfallenangel on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 09:58:25 AM AEST
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its good but its very sad keep up the writing
DEMON A.K.A ABBADON |
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Re: Cuts
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by hellsfallenangel on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 09:58:27 AM AEST
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its good but its very sad keep up the writing
DEMON A.K.A ABBADON |
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