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Vague

Contributed by N0body on Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 05:41:04 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry



I walked away all alone,
Ignoring your plead, your sad quiet moan.

But now I’ve traveled far over seas and past the luminous glowing moon,
But sometimes I fear that I left you too soon.

My love for wandering can only be so strong,
Because sometimes I feel that my path leads me wrong.

Sometimes I feel I’m that soldier going nowhere,
Following orders without a thought or a care.

Because now I’ve forgotten what I’ve once known,
I wonder what you all look like, because I’m sure that you’ve grown.

The clock ticks slowly but I know time flies fast,
Because I no longer want the future but only the past.

I’ve been walking forever, through every season,
Searching for answers, for a satisfying reason.

I’ve walked through wheat fields golden and brown,
Past great gray buildings in every town.

I’ve swam in the ocean, an abyss of blue,
Through luscious green forests, where ivy vines grew.

I lose track of miles and distance too,
And begin to lose my mind and my memories of you.

My heart forever aches with a lust I can’t mend,
And I’ll forever wonder if I’ll see you in the end.




Copyright © N0body ... [ 2004-11-29 17:41:04]
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Re: Vague (User Rating: 1 )
by cuddlytiger17 on Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 06:18:47 PM AEST
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This is pretty good! There were a few parts that seemed a bit forced, but otherwise I like it. You've got some really good lines.
"Sometimes I feel I’m that soldier going nowhere,
Following orders without a thought or a care."
^I know everyone is guilty of doing this; just going with the flow of things and not thinking about what they're doing.
"Because now I’ve forgotten what I’ve once known,
I wonder what you all look like, because I’m sure that you’ve grown."
^So sad, a line that truly pulls at ur heart. Definitely relates to anyone who's ever been seperated from someone they've cared for.
"The clock ticks slowly but I know time flies fast,
Because I no longer want the future but only the past."
^Great! Especially the first of these two lines.

And I love the imagery following these lines I've quoted. Good job! =)


Re: Vague (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 09:33:03 PM AEST
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great write.


Re: Vague (User Rating: 1 )
by kyletycz on Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 02:19:01 AM AEST
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awsome write, i think i know how you feel, there is a girl that no matter how hard ive tried i cant come to hate her, even though she doesnt seem to care about me at all anymore, and i cant get her out of my mind no matter how hard ive tried, keep up the nice work

l8r

Ninja Tycz




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