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Array ( [sid] => 72529 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => The almost made Mistake [time] => 2004-11-21 10:08:27 [hometext] => think twice b4 yu make the wrong mistake in going the devils way [bodytext] => I used to be such a sweet and cute little girl,
Now I’m a dark and depressing teen.
I’m stuck in a dark hole and can’t break free,
I can hear the devil say,” Come to me.”
As I’m walking towards him I see a bright bright light to the left of me,
I hear a voice that says,” Come, come to see the lord,”
I say,” Ok I’ll go through this door.”
As I’m walking through this beautiful light,
I hear my grand mom say,” Hello Destiny, are you ready for this flight?”
She grabs my hand and shows me around the place,
She says everyone’s glad to see my face.
I ask her,” Is this place Heaven?”
She smiles and says” Yes it is. Do you remember I came here when you were just eleven?”
She takes me to the Lord and tells me to sit down,
I can’t help but to have a little frown.
The Lord tells me,” Do not be afraid,
For I am only here to tell you the mistakes you’ve made.”
Then he says,” my dear Destiny, do not be a depressing teen, for you have parents that love you,
Almost as much as I do.
Go home and be a good kid, and remember live your life to the full,
And never be cruel.
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The almost made Mistake

Contributed by babygurl33 on Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 10:08:27 AM in AEST
Topic: oops

I used to be such a sweet and cute little girl,
Now I’m a dark and depressing teen.
I’m stuck in a dark hole and can’t break free,
I can hear the devil say,” Come to me.”
As I’m walking towards him I see a bright bright light to the left of me,
I hear a voice that says,” Come, come to see the lord,”
I say,” Ok I’ll go through this door.”
As I’m walking through this beautiful light,
I hear my grand mom say,” Hello Destiny, are you ready for this flight?”
She grabs my hand and shows me around the place,
She says everyone’s glad to see my face.
I ask her,” Is this place Heaven?”
She smiles and says” Yes it is. Do you remember I came here when you were just eleven?”
She takes me to the Lord and tells me to sit down,
I can’t help but to have a little frown.
The Lord tells me,” Do not be afraid,
For I am only here to tell you the mistakes you’ve made.”
Then he says,” my dear Destiny, do not be a depressing teen, for you have parents that love you,
Almost as much as I do.
Go home and be a good kid, and remember live your life to the full,
And never be cruel.

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Re: The almost made Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by little_genna on Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 01:02:39 PM AEST
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I am one of those 'depressive teens'
but i very much believe in our Lord,
He has held my hand through many
troublesome times.
I am glad you saw the error of your ways before it was too late.

take care

Gen xx

Re: The almost made Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by Sinned on Wednesday, 26th January 2005 @ 08:27:51 AM AEST
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Nice story interesting write.
Sweet girl stay in the light.
Grandma is right.
Pray God and ask grandma too--for why did the Jews atone for their dead ? The communion of saints already there through Gods mercy can help us still.
Jesus said;
I Am the God of the living and not the dead.Grandma on earth would surly help you---don't you think grandma in heaven would too?
Sinned

Re: The almost made Mistake (User Rating: 1 )
by SkC_cutie on Friday, 24th February 2006 @ 12:32:58 PM AEST
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different, but nice write. It is refreshing to read this poem, I think the topic is very good.

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