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the transfer
Contributed by
summers
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Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 05:17:42 PM in AEST
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the first bullet grazed his thigh
the second buried itself in his lungs
he was losing air
so i held his head in my arms
and i repeated to his cold face:
‘you’ll be fine, you’ll be alright’
the truth was:
he didn’t have long
i took my knife and dug it into his chest
until his body went limp
goodbye, old friend
i relieved his suffering
and now carry enough for both of us
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summers
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2004-11-16 17:17:42]
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Re: the transfer
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by neglected1 on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 07:03:37 PM AEST
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So very sad.. it almost brought tears to my eye.. in how i know what loosing a friend feels like.. but its almost harder to see them suffer..
you dont see too many topics like this
but i really enjoyed reading your piece..
it was short but very well written
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Re: the transfer
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by amatt on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 08:45:28 PM AEST
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| wow....i like it...it was just idk it was very cool ive never seen one written about something like this |
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Re: the transfer
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 12:28:53 PM AEST
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| this poem touched on such an obscure topic..and it really made u feel what it means to lose a friend in one of the hardest ways. I just hope it never happens to me, I have to be really grateful for that, and hope this poem gets to others in the same way. |
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Re: the transfer
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th January 2005 @ 08:15:42 PM AEST
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| This one was really sad. Blessings. |
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