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[aid] => mick
[title] => Windstorm
[time] => 2004-11-15 21:04:50
[hometext] => *** One of those that I didn't know was there until it just... tumbled out ***
[bodytext] =>
Daisy petals
Plucked one by one
And dropped without thought
To the ground
Where they lay, broken
Wilting
Wanting to be whole again
Whispered secrets
Pushed into the night
To dance about quietly, alone
In the dark
Where they cry, hushed
Lonely
Wanting to be heard again
Scattered thoughts
Picking themselves apart
To find answers, resolution
In the fog
Where they fail, hopeless
Swirling
Wanting to be known again
Until
The wind picks up
Sweeping through space and time
Driving consciousness out
Setting petals aloft
As whispers turn to echoes
And drive understanding
Like slanted rain
Into the ground
[comments] => 17
[counter] => 267
[topic] => 2
[informant] => Silent-No-More
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[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 40
[ratings] => 8
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => LovePoetry
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Windstorm
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 09:04:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Daisy petals
Plucked one by one
And dropped without thought
To the ground
Where they lay, broken
Wilting
Wanting to be whole again
Whispered secrets
Pushed into the night
To dance about quietly, alone
In the dark
Where they cry, hushed
Lonely
Wanting to be heard again
Scattered thoughts
Picking themselves apart
To find answers, resolution
In the fog
Where they fail, hopeless
Swirling
Wanting to be known again
Until
The wind picks up
Sweeping through space and time
Driving consciousness out
Setting petals aloft
As whispers turn to echoes
And drive understanding
Like slanted rain
Into the ground
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
... [
2004-11-15 21:04:50]
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Re: Windstorm
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by TheVoice on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 10:00:49 PM AEST
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simply beautiful.
The Voice
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Re: Windstorm
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 01:40:16 AM AEST
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A Gentle and beautiful write. I dont know what else to say really, other than its written to perfection.
Take Care
- Becca |
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Re: Windstorm
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by kyletycz on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 02:18:52 AM AEST
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holy moly, if thats a respectible reaction to this poem, then thats how i would describe it, it was wonderful, and im still in wonder of its majestic beauty
l8r
Ninja Tycz |
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Re: Windstorm
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 02:51:35 AM AEST
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| Aww..very beautiful, captivating conclusion, good comparisons also..welldone :-)venkat |
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Re: Windstorm
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 03:26:48 AM AEST
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Wow this is beautiful, very nicely composed and its very well written.
Hugs,
Jane |
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Re: Windstorm
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 06:00:13 AM AEST
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I am in awe.
I love the concept of this, and you did a wonderful job of creating a flow that brings the readerr to a moment...that moment...
when "The wind picks up"
It sweeps this reader up with those petals.
Awsome! |
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Re: Windstorm
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 06:00:55 AM AEST
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that was so beautiful,
takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: Windstorm
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 09:04:07 AM AEST
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Yes, this is lovely, and I see it as an exploration of growth and newness and maybe a bit of pruning.
Stitch |
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Re: Windstorm
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by namesaretaken on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 02:24:29 PM AEST
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I don't know what to say that has not already been said
Anyway I really liked these particular lines in the poem
Scattered thoughts
Picking themselves apart
To find answers, resolution
In the fog
Good stuff |
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Re: Windstorm
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by Spike on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 04:35:06 AM AEST
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Entropy - its such a drag. "Things fall apart, string bags full of oranges and things within the heart" (Michael Leunig). A beautiful take on the longing to be whole again. I really hope it is like this.
Spike |
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Re: Windstorm
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 08:40:32 PM AEST
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Very good, creative masterpeice.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Windstorm
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 11:36:05 AM AEST
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truely beautiful... hugs n' love nessa
@->>->:- |
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Re: Windstorm
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 01:37:34 AM AEST
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well presented thoughts, a delightful write.
5 stars!
Johnny. |
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Re: Windstorm
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 11:49:35 PM AEST
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| you are my new favorite poet/ess??? you are amazing, fantastic, surreal..etc..etc. i cannot beliece i haven't read or been told to read your stuff prior!!!!! i am ashamed for missing out when others knew. you have a new avid fan and friend. you are making me jealous so i must stop reading for the night, or will i??? |
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Re: Windstorm
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 07:29:21 AM AEST
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| you'll never cease to amaze me.. |
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Re: Windstorm
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by UnlovedChild on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 11:36:02 PM AEST
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| Creative and beautifully written. |
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Re: Windstorm
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 03:13:52 AM AEST
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Okay, by now, you probably think I'm a nut. Possibly over stating myself but I can't help that! It's all your fault you know. ;-) This is stunning, brilliant, and magic at work.
Continuing to find myself amazed.
Tim
:-)
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